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snugglebunnie
Dover, New Jersey USA
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Feb 13, 2009
 mortalez: ok I changed my profile what do you guys think?
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druidess6308
Reverse, Pennsylvania USA
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Feb 13, 2009
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snugglebunnie
Dover, New Jersey USA
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Feb 13, 2009
Hey Dru. 
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Ambrose2007
Badger, South Dakota USA
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Feb 13, 2009
druidess6308: I didn't even bother reading it...you're so right, Snugg! Do you think it was that bad, D?  I think M should've included that fairly important piece of information that he tends to become fixed in the initial Head Over Heels phase indefinitely (according to his posts here)...which will likely prove problematic for those wishing to transition to the "long-term relationship" phase...  
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Feb 13, 2009
druidess6308: I didn't even bother reading it...you're so right, Snugg! come on I tried to use humur, snd you judge it without reading it?
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Ambrose2007
Badger, South Dakota USA
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Feb 13, 2009
mortalez: come on I tried to use humur, snd you judge it without reading it? It does have humor, in my opinion, but perhaps could stand some editing cuts for concision. Also, the bit about being a bouncer and "protecting" your lady is more likely, in my opinion, to be taken as a red flag than as some salutary attribute...
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Feb 13, 2009
Ambrose2007: It does have humor, in my opinion, but perhaps could stand some editing cuts for concision.
Also, the bit about being a bouncer and "protecting" your lady is more likely, in my opinion, to be taken as a red flag than as some salutary attribute... I got the idea while watching TV at 4 in the mourning, so I was going for the infomercial feel. A freind of mine suggested I had to sell myself to get noticed so.....
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Ambrose2007
Badger, South Dakota USA
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Feb 13, 2009
mortalez: I got the idea while watching TV at 4 in the mourning, so I was going for the infomercial feel. A freind of mine suggested I had to sell myself to get noticed so..... Right - just read it to my girlfriend and she laughed out loud about the vending machine condom. She said "It's a lot more clever than most of the stuff I've read here." So you got at least one good review. And no, you can't have her phone number. We both agreed that you over-emphasized the protectiveness aspect. We thought if you simply stated you're a good protector and left out the bouncer reference and the repetition of killing spiders, etc., that that would make a better impression. You could mention that you're in good shape...anyone can see you're large and strongly built, so the protective aspect is implicit, I think. The rest, in my opinion, is pretty good. Maybe you should consider spell-checking it (a lot of spelling errors) - that would possibly make a better impression. After all, it seems clear you're aiming for a lady who has some brains, right?   
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Feb 13, 2009
Ambrose2007: Do you think it was that bad, D?
I think M should've included that fairly important piece of information that he tends to become fixed in the initial Head Over Heels phase indefinitely (according to his posts here)...which will likely prove problematic for those wishing to transition to the "long-term relationship" phase... Oh and staying in the "initial Head Over Heels phase indefinitely" would go along way toward making a relationship long term if BOTH parties adhered to it, like mom always said "What it takes to get em it takes to keep em" if people treated each other like they do in the first few months of a relationship relationships would last longer and the divorce rate would not be so high. so if what you call the "long-term relationship phase" is where you start taking your partner for granted and shift your focus away from them, then your right that would be problematic.
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Feb 13, 2009
Ambrose2007: Right - just read it to my girlfriend and she laughed out loud about the vending machine condom. She said "It's a lot more clever than most of the stuff I've read here." So you got at least one good review. And no, you can't have her phone number.
We both agreed that you over-emphasized the protectiveness aspect. We thought if you simply stated you're a good protector and left out the bouncer reference and the repetition of killing spiders, etc., that that would make a better impression. You could mention that you're in good shape...anyone can see you're large and strongly built, so the protective aspect is implicit, I think.
The rest, in my opinion, is pretty good. Maybe you should consider spell-checking it (a lot of spelling errors) - that would possibly make a better impression. After all, it seems clear you're aiming for a lady who has some brains, right? thanks for the input and i used a spell checker but I am wondering if its set on british because some of the changes made did not seem right.
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