a taste of the novel I'm attempting to write.
Let me know your thoughts.... Thanks!~ ;-)It was a sultry Summer evening in July. Sweat was dripping off of Summers' frail body but she refused to quit; she rested inbetween when her legs wouldn't take her any further and this was one of those moments.
She sat on the dusty highway shoulder near the bushes to be unoticed in the event she fell asleep. She peeled off her shoes and socks and began to rub her raw and aching feet.
The sun was sinking into the west and Summer swayed her attention to the georgeous colors in the evening sky. She marveled at their beauty; Passion Pink, Ruby Red, Violet Purple swirled together like a painters canvas.
Hope you like this little excerpt. Let me know what you think I could use some opinion.
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Comments (6)
At first it seems you're describing the season; then becomes an exhausted frail woman, who's on the run, out near woop woop (who's name happens to be Summer).
Maybe ya don't want to give away the plot?
Yes, It's well after midnight. 12:30am now. I too am in CA. Thanks for letting me know, so you think I should introduce the character before I go into the description?
I don't know if you have any reference books on hand, but I would hone the craft of writing the lead, or introductory paragraph of the story. Decide what type of introduction you want your novel to have.
There are many ways to lead into a story. Deciding on how you want to do it is all part of the fun. I'm no writing teacher...just someone who loves the written word.