Ashes

by QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario, Canada

Oct 2010 653 Views 18 comments

Ashes

I burnt your heart
I burnt your soul
burnt your carpet
and I burnt your floor...

But if I loved you any less...
Maybe then could I bring you happiness...
Or am I destined to only bring you pain...
And fill your heart with only rain..
.
If I built your house back up from the ground..
Then could I bring your heart around?
If I lie down and burnt with the ashes too..
Maybe then would you love me too?

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Posted: Oct 2010

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freeatlast64847Lanagan, Missouri USAOct 20, 2010

I burnt the toast,
I burnt the roast,
If I burnt too,
I'd be a ghost...

Just kidding, loved the symbolism in this one...

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 20, 2010

lol freeatlast... thanks for your comments and your humour.. means alot ... especially now..

GashlyAmish Hell, Ohio USAOct 20, 2010

bewildered. get the thought, just...the literal is making me pause. ouch. this is truly desperate longing...the ones we touch with hurting love, whether we mean to or not, are not the right ones. perfect description, quietstormf, thanks.

HotrodLarrysSt. Joseph, Missouri USAOct 20, 2010

I burnt a match
I burnt an insence
I burnt Myself
tho i didnt burn another

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 20, 2010

Thank-you Gahly for your comments........ sometimes so hard to express a love that has gone with the wind...

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 20, 2010

That is so very profound Larry! and kudos to you my sweet man, for your ability to see the forest through the trees... Always thought there was something more there...

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 21, 2010

The bottom line.. is/... soon they will see....... Get it my friend?

gotitallDungarvan, Waterford IrelandOct 21, 2010

when love burns with passion, it burns, not always smouldering. lovely heart searching verse, quietstormF.

shiraliDEVENTER, Overijssel NetherlandsOct 21, 2010

love is a burning fire,and I can feel yours!

keep torching us

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 21, 2010

Hi Gashly and thank-you for your comments... Just some scattered thoughts I had last night.. about a dream I had that disturbed me.... I am always trying to figure them out.. ya know?

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 21, 2010

Thank-you Gotitall... maybe that is it............ something that burns to hot... in the beginning... will smoulder in the end...

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 22, 2010

Thank-you Gotitall..

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 22, 2010

lol well I hope I am not burning you.. lol thanks for your comment...

EarlgreyteaLimassol, CyprusOct 23, 2010

Wow! Incredibly deep and poignant..., thank you...

paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandOct 23, 2010

I almost burnt myself looking for love and now that I found it I am burning with love's fever.Nice poem on Ashes.

online today!

Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida USAOct 23, 2010

Sometimes it is best to let the ashes be a gift to the winds and let em' scatter. You are destined for good things. Now just keep saying that till you feel it

QuietStormFOPSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaApr 14, 2011

Thank-you Erlgreytea for your beautiful, and encouraging comments.

niah9Auckland, New ZealandApr 14, 2011

Hi QuietStorm...I read your poem, thinking of the meaning, then reach the first comment...Free of course, and understood totally...I wonder if we'll ever know where he went...or maybe that is why. But there will always be a void, that hurts. Niah

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