So do you know this from the start That this one will take care of your heart Will love you when your down and out And even love you if you pout
Will stick with you through thick and thin And when it’s rough they’ll still hang in And as the years do pass you by They’ll still be there when you cry
It’s hard these days to find this one Who’ll stand by you til it’s all done. And when your old and not a charm They’ll keep your Heart from any harm
They’ll reassure you all is well And always say your really swell And dear you know that this is true You are the one through and through
This is what everyone dreams of having,true caring and love for each other
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKDec 10, 2010
Hi TMIT
A fine poem. I hope you don't mind me making a small observation. Being a bit of a traditionalist, I thought the first stanza was first class and you were using the word "You".
I simply think that reverting to "u" in subsequent stanzas rather than "you" just slightly detracted from an otherwise first rate write.
But who the Hell am I to offer an opinion, being in my 60's I just think that using so-called <msgtxt> in poetry never looks quite right. Maybe I should get a life............
Thank you on the observation of the U's instead of the you, when I write these down out of thought I use shorthand so to speak and did not check and correct them to be you instead of U's...I will definitley correct it in my book though..
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A fine poem. I hope you don't mind me making a small observation. Being a bit of a traditionalist, I thought the first stanza was first class and you were using the word "You".
I simply think that reverting to "u" in subsequent stanzas rather than "you" just slightly detracted from an otherwise first rate write.
But who the Hell am I to offer an opinion, being in my 60's I just think that using so-called <msgtxt> in poetry never looks quite right. Maybe I should get a life............
Regards
Fellsman
Thanks again