Sob of Soul

by caroljoyceManchester, Greater Manchester, England, UK

Dec 2010 919 Views 18 comments

Sob of the Soul

Pain enters in silent stream
Mocks the ghost of future dream
Mind numbed from seeking why
Into the bleak the seagulls cry
Moon creeps beyond the night
Hurting clenches, hard and tight
Shadow tiptoes in steps of sorrow
Mourns defeat of joy tomorrow
As real is etched beyond the stark
Seeking bright above the dark
As hand implores the distant light
My soul is shored to withstand the night

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Posted: Dec 2010

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Comments (18)

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKDec 14, 2010

Superb rhyme - and an iron determination to overcome adversity.
Enjoyed the read

Fellsman

caroljoyceOPManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKDec 14, 2010

I virtually never comment on my own writes.. But I indeed honoured, sir Fellman.
cj

Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida USADec 14, 2010

Excellent from beginning to end. Good strong writings

niah9Auckland, New ZealandDec 14, 2010

I could say walked, but that wouldn't be right...floated with you CJ....it was sad...scary but beautiful...Niah

jeddah12singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeDec 14, 2010

a beautiful,wonderful poem cj..thanks deary for sharing

dreamwolf5264francestown, New Hampshire USADec 14, 2010

O.M.G.!....YOU TOOK A PAGE RIGHT OUT OF MY BOOK!!! NICE POEM,FROM A BEAUTIFUL POETRESS

YOUR SO EMOTIONAL!LOL.

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USADec 14, 2010

Hi, caroljoyce,
The soul, reaching for the light in such poetic verse, has managed to transcend the pain and is surely shored to withstand the night

ReaderOfSoulsunknown, Texas USADec 14, 2010

May the soul find the light. Wonderful write!

beautifulyouNew York, USADec 14, 2010

This is gorgeous CJ..

It's simply amazing what we are able to shore when in direct Communion with our very Soul...

Just beautiful.. Bravo!

skinnyminnypinkKilkenny, IrelandDec 15, 2010

CJ, I loved it ... very evocative ..

trurorobAlicante, Valencia SpainDec 15, 2010

nice penning CJ
rob

paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandDec 15, 2010

A real sob of the soul...."hurting clenches hard and tight".very nice write.

jazzy75Houston, Texas USADec 15, 2010

caroljoyce - hauntingly beautiful...I really felt the raw emotions bursting forth.

walkermanok, IndiaDec 15, 2010

hi joyce....

agoodguy2havesuffolk, Virginia USADec 15, 2010

C.J.-this twelve line gem reeks...reeks of Carol! Without a sign, I'd know it was you, always deep and soulful, yet ending strong and upright. A beautiful night light. ;-)