Torn

by Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida, USA

Jan 2011 565 Views 6 comments

An opening small but weakened.
Spreading the length.
A journey, a path, jagged.

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Posted: Jan 2011

Actually written about a piece of paper being torn. Started to title it the letter

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAJan 2, 2011

Hi, Happygolucky4u,
It's amazing what a torn piece of paper can inspire. Nicely done! Happy New Year! May the path through 2011 be a smooth one!

agoodguy2havesuffolk, Virginia USAJan 2, 2011

H.G.L. - i agree, such a small act, such astute observation. ;-)

niah9Auckland, New ZealandJan 2, 2011

Great write Happygolucky4u...simple and unique...loved it.
Niah

Happygolucky4uOPTreasure Coast, Florida USAJan 31, 2011

Thank you so much for your comments.

Ladybee42East Liverpool, Ohio USAJan 31, 2011

kewl! if you add a word like 'full' (monosyllabic) you will have a proper Haiku!

Ladybee42East Liverpool, Ohio USAJan 31, 2011

in the middle line - sorry, by the time i checked the spelling for monosyllabic i'd lost track of the bloomin' sentence!

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