Nevermore

by marikiaTbilisi, Georgia

Jan 2011 775 Views 10 comments

Nevermore

I know who is the killer when I’m dead,
Love is to blame, but I am done with that.
Peace dwells where it was meant to be love’s nest,
It is my soul that’s stripped of love, for all is vain.
I never thought that love would ever harm and kill,
Hoped it would give me time, my efforts it would spare.
And if it dealt a blow it would then charge and miss,
And if it showed abyss I wouldn’t mind and care.
I thought I would be reconciled and bear the blow,
As all I needed was regard and feeling strong.
But what I've got is heart devoid of love and hope,
It wasn’t meant to be, it seems, your love is gone.
Don’t think I’ll ever miss you any more,
The void inside me tells me - nevermore.

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Posted: Jan 2011

About this poem:

An attempt at sonnet and Master Fellsman's valuable advice. I miss the time how it used to be and poets who left this corner very much. Hope they are coming back some time! Thank you, Master Fellsman, once again!

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pilgrimageofloveSydney, New South Wales AustraliaJan 9, 2011

oh marikia
a lot of pain there beautiful
One never knows

nevadalady01laughlin, Nevada USAJan 9, 2011

Oh dear marina, this poem is beautiful and i can really feel your pain.it appears that many of us are going through similar things at this time. hang in there sweet lady, your day will come

Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida USAJan 9, 2011

"I never thought that love would ever harm and kill" I wish that was true

Love is one of the reasons many do kill and harm. Be it love for a person or a material thing.
Be it intentional or unintentional it is painful at times. But it is always worth the reward to chance and love again. When the time is right. Hope all your wounds will be speedily healed.

beautifulyouNew York, USAJan 9, 2011

Hello marikia..

Love does not abandon, hurt, harm, or kill... people do.

May the Love that is you Soul, that cannot or will not leave you, slowly open your heart again, in your own time, such that you may receive the One who is capable of Loving you for all your beauty.

Namaste ~

marikiaOPTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 9, 2011

Thank you, dears, for all the kind words you have spared for me. If fact it was a very clumsy attempt at writing a sonnet - the first in my life, but I did not know any laws as Fellsman never disclosed them to us.

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKJan 9, 2011

Hi Marikia

I posted a reply about half-an-hour ago, but it seems that it is still swirling about somewhere in the ether. So forgive me if you eventually end up with 2 replies from me.

When I read the poem I immediately thought this is quite sonnet-like. Then I read your footnote.

I can easily mail you the technical requirements for a sonnet, or even post in a response on this thread if there was sufficient interest.

You have already figured out there are 14 lines in a sonnet, and the last two must be a rhyming couplet, sometimes called a 'heroic couplet.'

Elizabeth Barrett Browning popularised the Portugese sonnets, in her series of poems written in that style.

My preferred style is the tradional English sonnet. The first two sonnets in my trilogy are written in this style, the third one is a variation of that style which was used before Spenser and Shakespeare standardised the traditional English sonnet.

Best wishes

Bill x

marikiaOPTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 9, 2011

Thanks master Fellsman for your time and giving me a most valuable advice, which I would make a point of and follow. Marikia

marikiaOPTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 13, 2017

No matter how clumsy an attempt the fact that we were experimenting is what really matters. Thank you!

lovecanberealSydney, New South Wales AustraliaJan 14, 2017

"In the beginning I was mineral, then after a long time, became vegetable; and after another long time again, became animal; and after that man. Even though I was unaware, I was being taken on a long journey none the less. And I will pass through a hundred different Worlds yet" - Sufi saying.

marikiaOPTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 14, 2017

Wonderful quote and very much to the point: “A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step.” (Lao Tzu) Thank you very much, dear poet, for dropping in, kindest regards!