Beware my soft young heart in old decrepit shield, It'll make you feel regret, I'll take revenge, you'll see. You'll watch torment in eyes, forgiveness you will seek For what you've done, for what you've made me feel. For letting love revive in me you'll ask me to forgive, Cause you will have no rest, won't listen to your pleas. I'll take revenge, don't think it'll always be like this, I'll make it hard for you, I'll haunt you in your dreams. Until I take your breath away, until I make you feel the same Beware my soft young heart in old decrepit shield.
One of the best, exceptional poems I've read in the corner! It's truly flawless and pure. Enduring! Beyond praise and comment!
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKMar 29, 2011
I'll make it hard for you, I'll haunt you in your dreams. Until I take your breath away, until I make you feel the same Beware my soft young heart in old decrepit shield.
Stunning poem.
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKMar 29, 2011
Hi Marikia
Superb writing, a most enjoyable read.
Bill
Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaMar 29, 2011
A great poem Marikia. It conveys so much.
SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKMar 29, 2011
Loved this when I first read it earlier, and was going comment, but thought maybe I wouldn't get it right. I had intended to post how deep, insightful & sad it was... and hoped for the heart to have true love, with a place to rest & no more haunting(though I suppose there is always the potential for hurt where there's love-as in caring about someone & having to watch them go through hard times). But still, a place to rest if you find true love...
Extremely profound poem (and decided I would post whether I got the above right or not)
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Until I take your breath away, until I make you feel the same
Beware my soft young heart in old decrepit shield.
Stunning poem.
Superb writing, a most enjoyable read.
Bill
I had intended to post how deep, insightful & sad it was... and hoped for the heart to have true love, with a place to rest & no more haunting(though I suppose there is always the potential for hurt where there's love-as in caring about someone & having to watch them go through hard times). But still, a place to rest if you find true love...
Extremely profound poem (and decided I would post whether I got the above right or not)