Reminiscence A Pantoum

Jun 2011 1,338 Views 17 comments

Reminiscence ( A Pantoum)

*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*
Sitting here reminiscing of you
Wondering if you ever think of me
Sighing singing under the sky blue
Counting the stars one two and -- thee

*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*
Wondering if you ever think of me
Closing my eyes humming a melody
Counting the stars one two and -- thee
Longing for love that seems like an eternity

*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*
Closing my eyes humming a melody
Kissing you through the gentle wind blows
Longing for love that seems like an eternity
Wishing for you where the magic stream flows

*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*
Kissing you through the gentle wind blows
Sealing my heart save it for thee
Wishing for you where the magic stream flows
Sending all sweet memories by the sea

*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*
Sealing my heart save it for thee
Sighing singing under the sky blue
Sending all sweet memories by the sea
Sitting here reminiscing of you
*.. .. *.. ..* .. ..* .. ..*

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Posted: Jun 2011

About this poem:

Here is my 2nd attempt at "Pantoum" poem. :p Until now I still do NOT know what it is!!! lol - I borrowed the theme from Fellsman's poem "The Rover (A Pantoum)". Thank you Mr. Fellsman. : )

My 1st "pantoum" can be found at the following link, I posted it last year. :") Time passes but my writing's still the same. lol (bad as the same. lol) Thank you everyone for reading. : )
http://www.connectingsingles.com/poem13141/stupid-cupids-error-a-pantoum.htm?pn=2

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Comments (17)

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKJun 28, 2011

Dear thesunandthesea

Your pantoum is correct in all respects, it is a gentle romantic write that flows very well.

Thank you for your acknowledgement.

Fellsman

SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKJun 28, 2011

This is just beautiful, SaS twin! I love the line "...counting... one, two and -- thee"

Well, I love all of it - super-romantic, gentle, breezy, flowing...
very relaxing to read

I'll be coming back to read it again & again, whenever I need to relax

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKJun 28, 2011

Kissing you through the gentle wind blows
Sealing my heart save it for thee
Wishing for you where the magic stream flows
Sending all sweet memories by the sea

Like this very much, the pic is beautiful too.

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAJun 28, 2011

Hi, thesunandthesea,
Wishing for you where the magic stream flows Sending all sweet memories by the sea... In your pantoum, the emotions and words with their sweet melody crash gently over the reader. A most enjoyable read!

SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKJun 28, 2011

P.S.Thank you so very much for the wonderful greeting you made for my b-day. I loved it!!(I guess I didn't make it back here in time to respond individually as I was planning, but it was great, and I really appreciate it! Oh, and if you still have a copy of it, I'd love to have one)
Your SCatty Twin,
SCatlyn

Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaJun 29, 2011

Hi Sassy,
It's funny how we go through phases in poetry. Pantoums are lovely and I certainly tried them out. I think yours is great. Keep experimenting because its the nature of creativity and poetry. I'm just a little curious who "you" and "thee" are here but that's poetic license so you don't have to answer.

cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USAJun 29, 2011

Wow! You have Mr. Lion purring like a kitty. Sweet as one,two three!

kickit22auburn, Washington USAJun 29, 2011

i think it is pretty beautifully irresistable but not misserable.
you are so awesome glad too see you back again. you bring smiles too all who reads you.

kickit

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

Dear Fellsman,

Thank you very much for your comments and compliments. : ) I only know a lil English. : ) But I dare to write cus I’m crazy,

lol No, cus I think it’s fun. lol

Wish one day I could write it better. : ) and you will be proud of me cus I know Pantoum from you.

: )

Thank you very much again and again.

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

Dear SCatlyn,

^__^ yeahhh I love one two and thee too!!! Every time I count the stars I can only count one to --> two!!!!

>__< can’t make it to 'Three' when I have ‘thee’ in my head.. awwwww

If I can count one to ten, that’s mean I don’t have anyone on my mind and in my head anymore, and that’s sad!

Have you ever counted the stars ??

How many can you count? One? You? Thee? lol

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

Dear Odette67,

Thank you for your comment! I wrote this for someone I love who lives far away from me. : ) I can only send my kiss through the wind, embrace across the ocean..

^_^ I’m glad you liked it.

The girl in the pic is me !!!!! ( well, I wish I were the girl in the pic. lololol)

OH-- your pic is also beautiful))) have I told you yet? It’s stunning!!!

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

My dear gnj4u,

(((HUGs))) Thank you very much for your sweet comment.

I love it every time when I see your pic (smile) and comment. : ) Your smile brings JOY and Happiness to me.

^________^

You are out of my sight, but always in my mind and thoughts.))) I’ll send my love to Boston every night…

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

My Dear SCatlyn,

( lol ) you again! You are really a mischief! lol ( I didn’t say that okay! someone whispered me)

lol A Very Cute Mischief ! You asked me to send you a copy of the b-card but you stay ‘invisible’ all the time. lol cool.

I’ll try to find the right time when you become ‘visible’ and will send the card to you!!

lol

Mischief Scatlyn cute one!

(lol) ^__^ you don’t know I (almost) become a lady now. lolol

thesunandtheseaOPTampa, Florida USAJun 30, 2011

Dear Macduff5,

Thank you for your comment.

: “) I think Pantoum and Terzanelle are alike? What do you think? ^__^ I know Pantoum from Mr. Fellsman and I know Terzanelle and Villanelle you..thank you . :”) ( is that Vellanelle ? Or Villanelle? +_+)