Loves Slow Death

by Yankee4youSt. Albans, Vermont, USA

Sep 2011 817 Views 11 comments

Love's Slow Death

How did I know
you would play me so
Like a little mouse
Let me scurry back and forth
Into your welcome house
Then turn my love around
Left me laying still
Bleeding but alive
Now I'm wondering
If I will survive
Trust your lovely eyes
Love to hear your purr
Run fingers across your skin
As soft as chinchilla fur
All is staying calm
Warning was not coming
When you finally
Make a pounce
Caught in sudden grasp
sharp sunken claws
Did I not stop
To think of fear
Out of false confidence
And now I barely move
Life is fleeing fast
Love's slow death

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Posted: Sep 2011

About this poem:

Love is all about the chase for some.....isn't it?? :))

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Comments (11)

SUMMIT09DALLAS, Texas USASep 17, 2011

ITS THE CHASE, THE CATCH, THE MIND, THE FEAR, THEN THE DEATH.

Yankee4youOPSt. Albans, Vermont USASep 17, 2011

Hey Summit......You know I never though of all the steps that way...but you are right there!! I mean that's been my experience.....no kidding....maybe someday....we can break that chain.....

elo69santa cruz, California USASep 17, 2011

what can you do but try to be honest..go with your heart..then hold as best you can to the foundations of your own identity..when the wave comes crashing down upon you...

another great write Yankee,I really like your honest and sincere style...elo...

Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoSep 18, 2011

If its constantly breaking you apart,then its time to let go,love is not breaking,but its joyous. Thanks for sharing this

Yankee4youOPSt. Albans, Vermont USASep 18, 2011

Thanks PN1 I have heeded your advice....that whoooshing sound is heard.....and moving on is the only way forward...after paying due respects....but let me ask you....is it hard to love again when our guard is still in place?

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKSep 18, 2011

Hi Yankee

You write with quite fascinating insight into the human condition, and in this particular poem you deal with rejection in its rawest form.

Lucky the person who has never experienced the situation you narrate here... a very fine write...

Regards

Bill

Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaSep 18, 2011

Hi Yankee,

You've ventured into a more free verse form here and it is very good. A lovely metaphor with the cat and mouse and unfortunately..so true.

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKSep 18, 2011

How did I know
you would play me so
Like a little mouse
Let me scurry back and forth
Into your welcome house
Then turn my love around
Left me laying still
Bleeding but alive

A most excellent poem Yankee.

Quote
“We ought not to look back, unless it is to derive useful lessons from past errors and for the purpose of profiting by dear bought experience”

George Washington

arose1791Emporia, Kansas USASep 18, 2011

completely concur with odette there - both on the poem and on the lessons in life, only look back to learn and then move forward. I really like this one and it touches so dear.

Yankee4youOPSt. Albans, Vermont USAOct 10, 2011

Things that are lost are sometimes more than misplaced but are things that are gone forever....and like our life....it will be all over too someday....so moving forward is the only way to achieve true happiness in life....very well put...

Maxeen_1YORK, North Yorkshire, England UKOct 10, 2011

Meaningful and beautiful poetry such feeling's-Yankee4you

I go along with (summits comments :
The chase, The catch, The mind, The fear, Then death
............................
And Odette's (G.W.Quote ) .
We ought not to look back,
unless it is to derive useful lessons from past errors
and for the purpose of profiting by dear bought experience”
George Washington .[/size

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