Broken

by boyshchrm6barrie, Ontario, Canada

Oct 2011 1,344 Views 32 comments

Broken

Broken
He shuffles aimlessly
Half heartedly muttering words
Drooping head and listless gait
Broken man with
Wounded heart and shattered armour plate
Yesterday a fearless soul
Commanding voice
And feeling whole
Damn the whole female race!
Vanquished man subdued
Not with a sword
Nor with a mace
But just a single piercing word
That Now defines his
Creviced face

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Posted: Oct 2011

About this poem:

!$#@>?!!....darn woman!!!

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Comments (32)

deeprootlovesaudiarabia, Saudi ArabiaOct 17, 2011

short but really meaningful,always always great to read for u.thanks for share

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 18, 2011

Thanks Khaled. Glad you saw merit in it.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 18, 2011

Certainly you are an exception CloudySky. It wasn't
me that said it. It was this guy called
Literary License....yah...that's it!!

cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USAOct 18, 2011

Sounds like some of those darling females have ruffled some feathers. Oh well..they'll grow back..Great write.

jazzy75Houston, Texas USAOct 18, 2011

Powerful!! a defining moment

lucy777gunbarrel city, Texas USAOct 18, 2011

POWERFUL AND TO THE POINT NICE WORK!

EarlgreyteaLimassol, CyprusOct 18, 2011

I know exactly what you mean Canada..., lol... lovely and strong write...

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 18, 2011

Thanks CafeTwo. Ruffled...yes I guess
that's one way to look at it.

AyhraAdelaide, South Australia AustraliaOct 18, 2011

Good caught of the moment, very expressive

MycallingCork, IrelandOct 18, 2011

Really good write..like the style

swade777Grants Pass Area, Oregon USAOct 18, 2011

Just try to see your experience like a blistered hand after a day of shoveling dirt.... it hurts for awhile, but once the healing is complete, the injured area becomes stronger by the 'callous' that results!
'Life' is an adventure of piling on callous upon callous.... eventually, we'll be able to endure as much pain from the women as they've learned to endure from us!!

It's called... "Living a Healthy, Happy Life Through the Continual exercise of....'Callous-Stinics'

Cowboy Up and get back on that horse until your bottom toughens up to the ride beneath you!!

In the mean time.... keep the fantastic poetry coming!!!

moonontideSydney, New South Wales AustraliaOct 18, 2011

Aha!!!!Now you must thank us darn women for giving you the thoughts that created this great write.

Dont skittle me. We women also walk this walk.::bouquet:

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 19, 2011

Thanks Jazzy. @#$%^&*>.....women!!!.....lol

QuietStormFSouthern Ontario, Ontario CanadaOct 19, 2011

A great write.. the last few lines.. well I am speechless.. well no that's not possible...

but close.. you are really starting to amaze me more and more with your writings!

and I want details!

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 19, 2011

Thanks so much for your comments Lucy.
Much appreciated.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 20, 2011

Thanks for your kind comments
EarlgreyT.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 20, 2011

Thankyou Ayhra for taking the time.

thelmatallaGeneva, SwitzerlandOct 20, 2011

You've articulated very well the Broken feeling...a fine write indeed!

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 24, 2011

Thanks MC. Hey....what can you do?

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 27, 2011

Thanks Swade. Sometimes we put too much
faith in Love and it turns around and
kicks us in the butt.

itchywitchgalway, Galway IrelandOct 27, 2011

broken.. nothing can discribe that feeling yet your poem discribes it well enough boysh

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaOct 30, 2011

Thanks for your kind comments
Moonontide.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaNov 7, 2011

Well no...no way you could be Speechless QS.
You are a woman after all. Thanks for your
fine comments.

Happygolucky4uTreasure Coast, Florida USANov 7, 2011

What a sad description. I could visualize it in my head.

Any broken person is sad to see. Sadly it does not have to be just the love of a women it can be family or even things that can leave one doing the broken shuffle. It is sad but we do let others have this power over us.
Here flowers --->

A hug---->

And a kiss

I got more emoticons but hope these help.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaNov 8, 2011

Thanks for your nice comments Maxeen.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaDec 3, 2011

Yes Thelmatalla. Definitely the
feeling of being Broken.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaJan 19, 2012

Thanks Itchwitch. A very nice comment indeed.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaJun 27, 2012

Thanks Maxeen. Yes it was very
Cathartic. Good word!!!
Ty. sorry for taking so long
to reply.

boyshchrm6OPbarrie, Ontario CanadaJun 27, 2012

Thanks so much for your very nice Emoticons
Happygolucky. Thankfully that is all in the
past now, but I did want to demonstrate how
painfull rejected love can really be.

andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKJun 27, 2012

Hey my old friend...how are you doing?...seems the playground is short of a few playmates nowadays...it does mean there is plenty of space for old friends to play again.....lol...Andrew...