Togetherness Haiku

by Yankee4youSt. Albans, Vermont, USA

Oct 2011 1,781 Views 11 comments

Togetherness (Haiku)

Dreams don't want to stop
Twilight breaking dawn
Waking in your arms

Surrending my life
Giving up some ghosts
Receiving what now

Stop Wait Not Ready
I want better life
Living on the edge

Dark meets your light
Shine on empty space
Illuminate me

Don't forsake me now
I am still alive
Help me to survive

All I need is you
Standing by my side
Holding tight my hand

Together we go
Dancing into time
No more life wasting

Peaceful easy love
Touching both our hearts
Sharing all we are

Feeling much better
Joining up with you
Never alone now

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Posted: Oct 2011

About this poem:

First time writing Haiku write It's cool.....

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Comments (11)

cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USAOct 27, 2011

Had to read it several times Yank just to observe the style. I like the flow and the cadence this creates. You'll have to inform me of the prinicple..but very beautiful poem my friend.

Yankee4youOPSt. Albans, Vermont USAOct 27, 2011

It's suppose to be a string of Haiku..that fit together....I'm guessing each line should have five syllables and each stanza having 3 lines from others' examples..but I don't know....don't know much about this style either....

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKOct 27, 2011

Don't forsake me now
I am still alive
Help me to survive

Excellent Yankee...I especially lurve the above lines there is such deep meaning in them ...I read and re-read them...no doubt I will read them again...well done.

boyshchrm6barrie, Ontario CanadaOct 27, 2011

A tale of love unfolding Yankee.
Hope it is real. Good poem
nonetheless.

lucy777gunbarrel city, Texas USAOct 27, 2011

very well done Yankee,,,,

lucy777gunbarrel city, Texas USAOct 27, 2011

Haiku is a hard one! but you did a excellent job

thelmatallaGeneva, SwitzerlandOct 27, 2011

Indeed, this is a superb string of Haiku (though the standard one in English should be 3 lines (5, 7 and 5 syllables respectively)...but your 3 lines of 5 syllables sounds perfect. ..beautifully expressed, meaningful Haiku of Togetherness!! Bravo dear poet!!

SundaySilenceLittle Gasparilla, Florida USAOct 27, 2011

That's was your first attempt at Haiku? That was fantastic!!! I'm still struggling with first base.

AyhraAdelaide, South Australia AustraliaOct 27, 2011

Very nice Yankee4u

soulvirushamilton, Waikato New ZealandOct 28, 2011

great poem yankee,, i remember in school they were teaching us about haiku poems, wish i paid more attention because it seems like you professional writers on here is getting something out of this that i dont,,, i really am going to get my self a book about poem structure etc,,, i really like coming here i read poems, really great writers out there,,
very creative writing yankee

Yankee4youOPSt. Albans, Vermont USAOct 30, 2011

Hey soulvirus....I wish I had too i was too busy staring out the window at anything that walked by....anything that moved....I could not have survived school without sitting by a window...haha

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