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Weighing All

Sits in judgment, this life of chance
present to twelve chosen women, men
weighing all that lies in balance
what behavior could not amend

present to twelve chosen women, men
as around the table, with awareness show
what behavior could not amend
‘til the hour nears for the c*ck to crow

as around the table, with awareness show
all that is for them to know
‘til the hour nears for the c*ck to crow
when justice has nowhere else to go

all that is for them to know
guardian angels gates do tend
when justice has nowhere else to go
twelve, sharing, caring at the end

guardian angels gates do tend
where innocence freed, guilt pays for sin
twelve, sharing, caring at the end
step forward, to let time begin, again.

where innocence freed, guilt pays for sin
weighing all that lies in balance
step forward, to let time begin, again.
Sits in judgment, this life of chance.
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Posted: Aug 2012
About this poem:
My first Pantoum attempt, with rhyme (format: ABCD BEDF EGFH GIHJ IKJL KCLA).

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Comments (10)

Poetnumber1
Never heard of this style of poetry before but what a graceful way of ryhming pattern that you have created with such easeapplause Lovely one...M.M
LadyMorgana60
As we sit in Judgement we agree..excellent poem! & like this style thumbs up Thank you Gnj for sharing..plus your format, will jot it down.bouquet
niah9
subject adds weight, but as you know, I am simple minded when it comes to poetry.....but I enjoyed the format...made me think about it from two angles....Kathycheering teddybear
gnj4u
Hi, Poetnumber1, LadyMorgana60 and niah9,
I thank each of you for taking the time to read and leave your kind comments. They are most appreciated.
Yankee4youonline today!
Somehow all I thought about was sitting down for the last supper.....in this one.....great vision....angel
orientalkoru
Awesome poem, great format...enjoyed it thoroughly teddybear bouquet
morgen90210
Nice format ,bad in formula so I could try but still mess it up .sounds very interesting ,you make it sound so easy.peace
Redex
Very impressed with FIRST TRY it is a hard format (for me at least)peace thumbs up
Fellsman
Hi gnj

My recent visits to PC have been intermittent, hence me not even seeing this pantoum when you posted it. I'm glad it's made a return to near the top of page one - I really like pantoums, the repetition of lines make for such an easy flow, especially when they are read aloud!

This is a fine write and a soothing read.

Best wishes

Bill gift gift
gnj4u
Hi, Yankee4you, Although it started out with the judgment of innocence/guilt by a jury , the Last Supper, betrayal and truth each play a role in endings and new beginnings. Hi, orientalkorui, morgen90210 and Redex, I attended an hour-long "Fun with Formal Poetry" workshop in April that covered the Sestina and the Pantoum. I wrote 4 of its verses in class using lines from a couple of my existing poems. Then, the other day, I modified it to 6 verses. I usually just write whatever my pen dictates. This required work. It was an interesting exercise - and a challenge for me. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Hi, Fellsman, I, too, am pleased that this made it into your view. I value your opinion, especially given your vast experience. To all, The most meaningful compliment for me is that the reader has found something I have written worth reading. Thank you for your generous comments.
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