Who Am I

by Unknown

Oct 2012 441 Views 8 comments

Who Am I

Author: Unknown

Who am I…
To the rabble and the wise
Am I just a young and shallow face
that the many years erase
Or do they wonder …
If I am more than that?

How can I …
Bring the world beneath this guise
In the silence of my languished soul
therein lies a troth unknown
Do they see an ugly man
… alone?

I work no day with self deception
I am but one common grain of sand
but the sun does not rise … for every man
There is no man …
ever born a starless sky
beneath his naked hide.
And now my heart is clear …
I see where lies the truth
I am from what I do …
and I do just what I am …
Yes I am a lucky man … inside

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Posted: Oct 2012

About this poem:

I wrote this during a period of soul searching a number of years ago ... I think we all have to reflect about ourselves, who we are, where we're going ... we need to be thankful for what we are not what we have ... peace to all

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Comments (8)

LadyMorgana60Norwich, Norfolk, England UKOct 16, 2012

Hi Positive and welcome to our Poets corner

Enjoyed your style, nice write.

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKOct 16, 2012

I see where lies the truth
I am from what I do …
and I do just what I am …
Yes I am a lucky man … inside

A deeply soul searching poem.

jazzy75Houston, Texas USAOct 16, 2012

Welcome PositiveInNature....I enjoyed the search.

mcradloffPlatteville, Wisconsin USAOct 16, 2012

One thing nice about Canada is the elbow room and the health care. You don't have to suffer from the mess that will be created if health care continues to rise in price the way it has. I think of the starless sky and how that guy jumped from a balloon about 23 miles above the earth, but he wasn't jumping from space, that is 63 miles above the earth.

PositiveInNatureOPAbbotsford, British Columbia CanadaOct 16, 2012

Thank you folks ... I'm glad you appreciated my attempt at prose ... I have really enjoyed searching for other "real poets" that are on the site ... there are many incredible bards with unbelievable talent ... keep them coming I'll see if I can learn something and eventually be able to keep up with the rest of you ... peace to you all ... thanks again for the warm welcome ... cheers ...

Ladybee42East Liverpool, Ohio USAOct 16, 2012

This is very good writing PositiveInNature, you may not see yourself as a poet but you do have a way with words that keeps the reader interested. Sometimes using 'I' too much causes a poem to be referred to as a 'diary entry', but here your poem is about the question 'who am I'? so the 'I's are necessary. I particularly like the lines 'but the sun does not rise... for every man' and 'There is no man ... ever born a starless sky'. These are strong truths written well and give the piece strength where many poems run out of juice trying to rhyme