A fog rolled into the leafless hollow Fallen and faded of glorious color A withering rug of molding mass Growing dark is dank November In the midst of a life in crises So lies swollen shut My eyes are cried with cold Blurry is first glimpse of snow
Now water running clean and sober Down streambed past a boulder Scored with ancient glacial scars Across its smooth face bored As stories born shiny and wet So waits freezing still My breath clouds into my face Mixing with the fog that brews
And now, across a squeaking bridge Floor of sagging wood grows moss Hiding rot from within its mass Cracked and rusted its paint peels And loosens old skinny nails So goes aging time My heart grows weaker while I pass the old millstone by
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Posted: Nov 2012
About this poem:
Once an old mill stood near an old covered bridge..and all that remains of the mill is the old millstone that now rests half buried in the streambed...below the falls...under the bridge...down an old dirt road late this fall creates my mood in free verse.
This is just wonderful Yankee, I just love your descriptions the imagery is wow! There are little moments in the poem when the images could be of a face or a place and I just loved this idea. Double meanings in poetry just enrich the whole piece. Cool write sir
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKNov 12, 2012
Hi Yankee
Although there is a thread of desolation running through this narrative, there is also a wealth of terrific metaphor which transports the reader right by that stream alongside you.
Hi, Yankee4you, A fog rolled into the leafless hollow...A withering rug of molding mass... There is so much dark, dank, decay in The Old Millstone's verses. Were it not for the wonderful imagery and the hope of water running clean and sober, my heart would surely sink through the squeaking bridge's Floor of sagging wood.
LadyB-- Ahhh the imagery is a latent talant for the back country rural folks. You should read some Rowland T. Robinson, a Vermont writer from the 19th century. May I suggest you browase the following link...
Bill... The end of all feels very desolate...as the woods shut down...and the old berries ferment on the bushes....and the birds that stay hunker down.....I'm glad you picked up on the mood.....
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Cool write sir
Although there is a thread of desolation running through this narrative, there is also a wealth of terrific metaphor which transports the reader right by that stream alongside you.
A fine write
Bill
A fog rolled into the leafless hollow...A withering rug of molding mass... There is so much dark, dank, decay in The Old Millstone's verses. Were it not for the wonderful imagery and the hope of water running clean and sober, my heart would surely sink through the squeaking bridge's Floor of sagging wood.