Confetti bubbles in a heart while bullets surf a brain Unspoken deeds rewritten to hide an act of shame To Strive and Thrive within a page of life and love and honor when trust is sold as promised land to devil... from a Mother. When one can see beyond the stench of death in loves design, a dying wish...from graveyard shift will capture greedy minds! So Shhhh don't tell... of broken spell When book of life is driven A bodies work in all its acts Is wealth in time and vision Calmly waiting for the day Of fate in wheels of mission
socrates44San Fernando, Trinidad and TobagoMay 20, 2017
Martina
Pretty deep stuff! Quite frankly, I cannot say I fathom it all, (perhaps due to my aging brain) But I get the overall sense of karma, especially in the last four lines:
socrates44San Fernando, Trinidad and TobagoMay 22, 2017
Martina
This is the most intriguing piece of writing I have seen on Poetry Corner.
The phrase "When one can see beyond the stench of death in loves design,...." is unique and exquisite.
I have some interpretations of parts of it which I wanted to forward to you by email for your feedback. However, I am blocked by your email restrictions from doing so. Perhaps, you can send me an email, if you wish, so I can send my interpretations.
Have a nice day!
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandMay 23, 2017
Hi Sophia
I appreciate your feedback so nice to hear from someone I admire in thought, and word, thank you for your wonderful comment.
Martina Too encapsulate, the mind, the body and it's soul in write, you've devoured it here, of course in the way to a reader's delight, powerful words bring upon powerful thought. By ones that can extrude it to a way of realism.
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandMay 24, 2017
Hi Mac
Always a pleasure to hear from you thank you for the lovely comment, I hope your friend enjoys her stay and holiday
Martina xxx
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandMay 24, 2017
Hi socrates44
Thank you so much for your wonderful response I have sent you a PM
Martina xxx
lovecanberealSydney, New South Wales AustraliaJun 18, 2017
Martina, you somehow summed up the great Unity of everything (or a large part of it anyway) high accolades for this...
niah9Auckland, New ZealandJun 18, 2017
Don't you just like the thought and outcome that is Karma........mmmmmm Kathy
RedexNorthumberland, England UKJun 18, 2017
Beautiful depth of feeling, captures the circle of life. A wonderful poem a toatal forgivness
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandSep 6, 2017
Thank you all so much for the wonderful comments I very much appreciate the feedback
Much love
Martina xxx
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandSep 7, 2017
Hi Mike
Thank you so much for your thoughts, always nice to hear from you
Martina xxx
Ronnie779Aberystwyth, Gwynedd, Wales UKSep 7, 2017
I enjoyed the poem very much- very well written and very deep and from your heart and soul...
rapturecaptureOPkerry, Kerry IrelandOct 4, 2017
Hi Ronnie
Thank you so much for your beautiful comment!
Martina xxx
IncubusBaigIslamabad, PakistanOct 5, 2017
Nicely written.. but a bit too scattered for a simple brain like mine..
So are you still waiting calmly for fate on wheels?
Comments (23)
Rob
Pretty deep stuff!
Quite frankly, I cannot say I fathom it all,
(perhaps due to my aging brain)
But I get the overall sense of karma,
especially in the last four lines:
Powerful write!!!
Kathy
Martina xxx
Great revelries!
It's nice to read some poetry. A Irish friend of mine will be back in your vicinity soon. She's not a half bad Bridge player.
This is the most intriguing piece of writing I have seen on Poetry Corner.
The phrase "When one can see beyond the stench of death in loves design,...."
is unique and exquisite.
I have some interpretations of parts of it which I wanted to forward to you by email
for your feedback. However, I am blocked by your email restrictions from doing so.
Perhaps, you can send me an email, if you wish, so I can send my interpretations.
Have a nice day!
I appreciate your feedback so nice to hear from someone I admire in thought, and word, thank you for your wonderful comment.
Martina xxx
Too encapsulate, the mind, the body and it's soul in write, you've devoured it here, of course in the way to a reader's delight, powerful words bring upon powerful thought. By ones that can extrude it to a way of realism.
Always a pleasure to hear from you thank you for the lovely comment, I hope your friend enjoys her stay and holiday
Martina xxx
Thank you so much for your wonderful response I have sent you a PM
Martina xxx
Much love
Martina xxx
Thank you so much for your thoughts, always nice to hear from you
Martina xxx
Thank you so much for your beautiful comment!
Martina xxx
So are you still waiting calmly for fate on wheels?
Thank you for the lovely comment
Martina xxx