nice poetic vision cosmosis "rusty swings like derelicts sleeping in the weeds."...very discriptive. we all hope to dream.
RobinsonCrusoeMsida, Majjistral MaltaJun 2, 2010
Cos -- this poem is excellent. And I congratulate you on your choice of form. Its different, and looks challenging. But I dont know cause I never tried it myself. I love it though! And I like the way you use imagery to communicate, the tombstone, the bell tower, schoolhouse. Particulars that make the ghosttown real. Goodguy picked one of the best in here I think: "The rusty swings like derelicts sleeping in the weeds." I can imagine them passed out smelling like cheap booze. I also like the picture and "THE HOPE OF 41." Forgotten for sure or maybe just repressed. Love this!
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