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She hears..and sings back to you..
Of that I'm sure..Daniel
Beautiful words to touch a heart that came from your heart.
How can you fail..

Ljj..

OK
HHHmmm...
Alright, first off I noticed your words in there.
BUT, too much was lifted from the Fugees. Secondly and probably most important...because you like the song but didnt quite understand it...you wrote a piece that was contradicting all over the place.
Killing me softly can easily be interpreted as a love song but that is not the case, in fact far from it.
It was written by Lori Lieberman in response to another lyricists piece. After seeing Don Mclean not knowing much about him Lori was struck with awe by his most famous piece `American Pie'. ( you know...Bye Bye Miss American pie...) The song written about the death of Buddy Holly in relation to the `day music died' touched Lori deeply. (`I felt all flushed with fever')
She too felt the same way and while relating to Don's beautiful lyrics and melody was deeply pained. He was in fact `killing her softly with his fingers'.
This pain of realization is further enhanced by Don's aloofness to the suffering

`He sang as if he knew me,

in all my dark despair,

and then he looked right through me'

So in the end its a song about suffering and not really at all about love. Just thought I would share that with you and maybe help you understand why its always better when it comes from your head and heart instead of from another persons.

Blizza, I am not supposed to judge, but I think that it is defensible to defend. This is the second time today I have seen you place words that will cause hurt on people's work; it is the second time that I have seen you complain that the poet is not writing from his soul. How would you know?

This is not a professional writer's site, not a literary criticism page; people write here to share feelings and form friendships.
Please see : poetry rules, section 10--positive and constructive feedback only.

'Correction does much but encouragement does more' ( Johan Goethe).

CJ..

Ljj..

I agree with you caroljoyce...

Any negativity should be focused in the forums...plenty of that type of negative comments on there...

Dear Blizza801 (You are killing ME softly,) I have seen some deep writing from you, but not callousness????