RE: The Spirit Stone (An Adventure Story)

Hi acdcrock,

Thank you for sharing some of your writing. It's great that you have got something started, so just keep writing for now to get your ideas down.

At some stage, however, you will need to get your story into some sort of order. I am no expert in writing children's books but a few tips I can pass on to you.

You need to decide on your reading audience: Know what age range you are writing for. Then you can decide whether it is to be a picture book for younger readers, or a p/b for the older reader, or for the more fluent reader and so on. This will dictate how you present the narrative. Younger reader or even the non-reader requires the adult to read to them and is generally written in the third person adult narrator. (For young adults, it's generally multiple narrators, with first person point of view and lots of dialogue). Your story seems aimed at the young reader. Perhaps you could shave it and gear it towards an older reader's picture book? A few options to explore. Perhaps an adventure series with one or two of the same protagonists?

If it's for the older, independent reader, it's generally written from the first person child protagonist point of view with a fair bit of dialogue. Also, there is little emphasis on character development or even plot, especially with younger reader picture books. Mostly it's more show than tell and with a lot of dialogue.

So there is no formula, but there are some common characteristics that publishers require and that the public is used to.

Lastly and the biggie. Read, read, read. And then start reading again...Get hold of as many different children's books published in the last 3 yrs as possible. Go mainly for those that have won prizes, but not restricted to those.

You obviously love to write and with the boom from the Harry Potter series, as well as The Hunger Games trilogy(your Izzy and her arrows reminds me of Katniss in the HG's)it has ignited a spark of creative writing. Keep at it, but do learn the craft. It looks simple, but it's incredibly complex.

Have fun writing typing and consider joining a local writer's group.

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RE: Is there anything more painful than unrequited love?

Of-course things change. All the time.

As for whatever the issue, we can change how we interpret the events. We can't and shouldn't begin to, change the other person's attitude.

Unrequited love means unresolved issues. And a lack of willingness to let go of the past.

RE: Is there anything more painful than unrequited love?

Agreed. There is lots more painful. Loss of a child, loss of limb, and so on.

Nonetheless, sometimes it is all relative. For the person suffering, at the time, there seems to be nothing worse, because the issue has grown so out of perspective.

RE: Is there anything more painful than unrequited love?

All well and good Lookin. In some cases, surgical intervention is warranted, but unless the person makes major lifestyle changes, not much changes if the procedure is reversed. Best to modify behaviour in a sustainable way for the long-term and reap the health and fitness experts.
wine (red wine instead of beer. - it has resveratrols, anti-aging,lol)

RE: Hey Womens! Yeah you!!

I think RDM and patmac could easily answer that one. They know all about these things....laugh

RE: Hey Womens! Yeah you!!

Oh, but sweetie, darling, that's to save your energy for later...you will be chasing me around the lake.....hang on, it's me taking you on a date...Sorry Dj, correction - I will be chasing you around the lake.doh doh(me sweating!!)
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RE: Hey Womens! Yeah you!!

Well, Dj, I just took a peek at your profile for some hints on your likes and dislikes. Unfortunately you wrote all about us poor damsels giving up hope on ever finding anyone....so I guess I'm having to wing it a bit here...

Here goes....ummm..dunno.laugh

Oh, well, whatever we do, it will be slow and leisurely, preferably at least partly out in the fresh air...Somewhere in the mix, yummy food, lots of talking and laughing...and maybe go feed some ducks at the Botanic Gardens.grin...Thanks for the lovely time. First date in ages.smitten laugh
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Just for Gina- because she deserves it!

Some of these u/e folk are going to get the heave ho soon, with mining jobs being posted up where they can be seen

No foreigners in Aussie mining jobs: PM

RE: Is brutal honesty one of the most important things in a relationship?

OK, not sure I want to ask what is a Glasgow kiss, coming from the land of Haggis, but it sounds like a good plan.laugh

Have you moved back to Ireland vinny?
Hope all is well with you.hug wave

RE: Finding the right person

Then again, it's a bit like childbirth...It's gotta hurt first before you get to experience the joy that (eventually!) follows...

To the men here...just believe us.laugh

RE: Finding the right person

It's too cold for that, curly.cold ...
well, not quite that cold.laugh

RE: Is brutal honesty one of the most important things in a relationship?

Brutal does not = violence.

When the word 'brutal' is uses with speech context, it generally means no holds barred, no thoughts withheld - that's all. But that doesn't mean that what is said has to be abusive. No need for that either.

Just for Gina- because she deserves it!

Yes, mostly your own after paying taxes all these years!professor

Just for Gina- because she deserves it!

Hi bubbles,
I know, it's a widespread issue. When it involves Gina, it hits the media. A good thing as it will continue to highlight the issue which I raised above. If we looked at the u/e figures, it amounts to tens of 1000's, so it's not as if we have zero unemployment in this country. What it might be showing is that a lot of these u/e Aussies have little pride and could care less about contributing to society, self-satisfaction etc. You will never see a Vietnamese or Indian sitting around taking welfare when they can work, and multiple shifts when they can.

I'm not having a dig at Gina, but that perhaps she could be in a position to force the Fed. govt to pressure Aussies to get off their butt, and make a conscience issue out of it. Someone in her position could have a lot of positive political clout. But she does opts out. Perhaps it might change come 1st July when new legislation kicks in. One can always hope.

Just for Gina- because she deserves it!

OK, then what if the Unions do find enough Aussie workers.

And by the way, when does this new thing kick in, whereby unemployed family folk happy to collect massive fortnightly dole cheques instead of going to work, will actually have their payments cut if they don't get off their butts?? I think that should free up a good portion of the workforce.

RE: Is brutal honesty one of the most important things in a relationship?

Only once can I say that I have been brutally honest - it was extremely cathartic for me, something no therapy could buy. It was also high time that person heard what I had to say. He took it all.

Other than that, honest yes, brutal no. No need.
Also, no need to sweat the small stuff. Honesty for the point of nit picking is destructive.

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RE: Finding the right person

It can and does happen at times and it looks like you have found your hole in one....It's imperative that we don't harbour fears from the past, be cautious, but so much that we put up inpenetrable barriers.

Having said this, I have been on my own for so long now, that I think I would be in shock if anyone showed any interest.laugh

Just for Gina- because she deserves it!

What is this woman thinking??? wow

As if she can't afford to pay Aussie rates to Aussie workers!!

And what is our PM thinking, allowing this to happen??thumbs down



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RE: horror films

This film is based on actual crimes committed in South Australia
(again) uh oh

RE: horror films

This film gave me nightmares...



Aussie Land has made some of the most gruesome movies...


Because they have much real-life material on which to base them.
uh oh uh oh uh oh

RE: Economical break throughs

I'm now traveling over 280km every Tuesday...Where do I get hold of a prototype??applause

RE: Corby

No idea, Lookin - they sounded good at the timelaugh

....recal,,,recal...recal....jeez, I can't even say it now.rolling on the floor laughing

RE: Corby

This has been happening for years, albeit only the most recalcitrant of young 'uns do get locked up for a time. Certainly 15-18 yr. olds do.
I worked with them years ago...sone of the best years of my life.

RE: Corby

That's because there are so many children in parliament to look after!doh

RE: Face Book

Your photo hasn't though.

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RE: Polyamory relationships

sounds like a lot of nonsense.doh

RE: Face Book

oops....'til wash gets to her?

RE: Face Book

So it's you, who's been feeding Gina all the pizza. Can you at least make sure it's low fat cheese and ease off on the crust just enough 'til was gets to her? laugh

RE: So do Cats and Dogs in different countries communicate in different languages?

I have a habit of talking to my dogs in Italian, such as 'vieni qua' for 'come here'...a bilingual dog.laugh

Good question though, Wabbet. I know that bees speak different languages. Put German bees and French bees together and the hives are abuzz with mahem.laugh
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RE: Polyamory relationships

Wot's that, daggy??
Is it something to do with poly filla of some sort?...
Yanno. the kind that binds people together?tongue

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