I would suggest getting rid of the photo with the wires. The outdoor photos seem most appealing. Always try to shorten things up. Many, especially guys, have short attention spans. So start reading your profile and see how long it takes. Too long? Then shorten it. Hope this helps. :) And the guarantee is very speculative. I would say "hope" instead, or something similar.
, it will help you very much in correcting the English. Just use you best language and have it translated into English. That's what I do when I'm speaking Spanish. My spanish isn't good at all, but is good enough I combine it with the google website. The other portion is just any good writing. Set it aside for a day or two and say things as concisely as you can.
Hi, For someone who is persnickety and actually reads the profile, you have some errors that should be corrected. Here's an example that everybody should have mentioned: "im looking for a man who is comfortable with themselfs and knows who they are". Numerous errors in just this one line. Here's how I'd correct it: "I'm looking for a man who is comfortable with himself, and knows who he is." See the difference?
E-mail me if you'd like, when you have it all fixed, and I'll be happy to review it again.
You have a camera in your hand that will take lots and lots of photos. There is no reason to have just one. Dress differently, and use variation. Pull your hair back in one or two. You look like you are probably very attractive, but one sample with your hair in the way doesn't work too well for me. I think you'll do great with more pictures. If you have kids, let each one pick a favorite photo if they want to. Then you automatically get somebody else's opinion. :)
Hi, You have a Masters Degree and can't write complete and descriptive sentences about someone that might want to spend the rest of their life with you? What is wrong with that picture? If you just had a HS diploma, I'd maybe be okay with it, but I've seen much better from those with only a HS diploma.
You may be healthy, but your pictures look a little too thin, mostly your neck. Maybe try a scarf or turtle-neck so as to not emphasize this?
My opinion is that your profile is very negative. I think what you say about your job running the soup kitchen is great. But saying that you "spend most of my spare time in the city centre feeding the homeless which I really enjoy." sounds like you would prefer to be there rather that with the man looking at your profile.
My opinion is keep the "soup kitchen" comment, and completely re-write the rest. I'd never reply to such a profile, except in a "profile review".
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RE: I hope to find a man in my life.
I very quickly lost interest in reading, " I am. If..." A little help with grammar and spelling can be found onHope this helps.
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