A Thread for Writers of Anything (Created with Prose in Mind) ( Archived) (48)

Poetry.com has things by lots of
different Jacqueline Smiths and
lots of different Jackie Smiths
and I don't want to read the ones you
like and think you might hate them
and the ones you hate and think you
might like them. Tell me which is
which.

You were reading "Technological Fantasies"
it is actually the life story of the kid
born to the pregnant woman. Takes a while
to get there! Thanks, by the way, for
starting it.

dpw

i am the one with the Brandon poem.read what you like.yw i just have to take the time to finish your story,really do it justice.

OK, I read all your poems, Jacqueline M. Smith, lyrical
comic poetess. There are some mistakes, by the way,
change the last word of the first line of the poem to
Zoloft to 'be', I think, and spell nausea right in the
poem that features that word so prominently, but these
are details. I liked them very much. Your poems are
comic, like you, and lyrical in nature, like
Aristophenes. You should partner up with a
composer and write a musical comedy as a
certain person will do in a certain book you
are reading by a certain disreputable author.

dpw

thanx doug but who is Aristophenes?

okay

Great Idea!!!!!!

Hear Me Tonight - Words and Music by Rhythmatist

I pray for shelter from the rain,
so many days struggling in pain.
I hope you hear me when I call you,
I can only live life through you.

(Chorus)
Hear Me Tonight, Keep my dreams in sight.
Give me the Fight, to fight for what is right.
Hear Me Tonight, only my will has survived.
It is my belief in you that's keeping me alive.

Life is never perfect, we all know it's true.
Depression harbors sickness, in everything you do.
If your feeling down, a minor key the only sound.
Find another outlet, good times will come around.

(Chorus Again)
(Bridge)
May your presence grow in my life.
May you lift me far from this strife.
Let me see life through your eyes.
Not sit in judgement and criticize.

(Chorus Again)


I would post the music too! But thats against the rules. Needless to say if you search Yahoo for Sheehan Sound Engineering The TecTonics, you can locate the MP3. This is a forum topic I'm into!!!!!

I'm putting this thread in my bedroom,lol.
Seriously, I will check that out.

The great thing about poetry is the interpretation of the reader. The truth is this is a open prayer that was fashioned into a song. I could also see it applicaple to someone you love. It's all up to you to decide!!

wow!I've been off line all day and had to search for this thread.I have my anneversary poem on poetry.com.But I'm really not sure how to find it.I just put it on there out of boredom one day.As far as the childrens stories go,I have some comical,some are kind of self help.Kind of like a jamie lee curtis thing going.lol.Cute,with the name jaqualine smith,it seems you already have a foot in the door,if you want to write romance.My journal I've been keeping since I was 13.had to throw that particular year away though.My mom read it and I got into major trouble over some things.Yikes!but ages 14 through 23 I got covered.

A note for Chrissy, when she gets here. It is very
easy to find Jackie's poety. Go to
Do a search for --
last name: Smith
first name: Jacqueline
you will find several Jacqueline M. Smiths,
she is the one with a poem named Brandon.
You will recognize her style and content
immediately. They are lighthearted, lyrical,
comic poems, well-written. I think she could
write the lyrics for a Broadway musical, they
are that sort of thing, I think, but I am
oriented that way.

dpw