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May 16, 2008 2:10 PM CST date with a nun
jimmysolo
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Paul, had not seen Megan, for over five years,but she looked as sharp and as lovely as before..her striking red and long curly hair, her freckly face, with those absorbing and intelligent blue eyes...Megan was a vibrant and lively woman..but that was 5 years ago..she looked the same but had the years been good to her...He looked at her as she was gazing back at him.

Paul quest after all after these years...It was a chance meeting at a bookshop that brought to sweethearts together.

she looked with wondering eyes at him, well paul tell me about you, what have you been doing these years...

he looked at her...does this bother you she said pointing her slendour fingers to the collar she wore...megan was a nun....

not bother exactly was his reply..just suprised...

dont be megan answered...i had a lot of times when life was good but then i just had to find something more..

and this is it ..

yes i think so...i am contented paul...for the first time..

paul just looked at her...she saw his perplexed look and reached out her hand and caught his...yes paul...i am a novice and in training now and i like what i do...

be happy for me...

paul mustered himself and said i am megan if you are..

yes i am paul....

the time went as two old friends renewed moments, smiling and laughing she was still the same megan in part...though paul felt he had lost something...

they were once childhood sweethearts..but her family moved her away and they lost contact...it was just the other day he saw her and it was a wonderful suprise and to be around her again just brought back so much...

i am at st michaels she replied...should you want to meet again sometime..

what of you paul...he told her of his life since then and how he was settling into his new job...he was a doctor at last..you made it then ...yes megan....and you are happy ....yes megan...he said it with tongue in cheek.

soon they were parting to go their several ways...he looked at her as she looked at him....she could see in his eyes he was bothered...its for the best paul .....megan put out her hand...paul looked and took it..they shook...though both had been affected by the meeting....its for the best paul said megan...and with a little tear in her eyes she turned and hurried away.....

paul thought...st michaels ....and walked off in a slighty better mind...maybe...
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May 17, 2008 4:29 AM CST date with a nun
this is good..

really good.


you need to make a difference or something like that with the dialogue parts... there are parts I get a bit mixed up on who's talking...

the story is really good...

and him a doctor...

I can just see it going on...

but my way woud be very naughty!
rolling on the floor laughing rolling on the floor laughing

a nun and a doctor!

also, those things here in the brackets ( "...") I don't knwo what they are called...... those usually encase the dialogue.... but I've heard some people don't use them.... I don't know if they're a must in writing or not,


your best one so far...

hug hug cheers
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