Dang, what did i do now??

Graceful and collected she packed,
Standing on one heel, a tut and shrug.
No recourse for these actions,
She vowed to never slop up this slack,
Forgetting all hearts she started,
Piercing the void, every step clicked
Deep into his brain, her scent
Embracing the magician in her moves,
The silence that followed the door
Rocked me like a helpless lamb.
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Posted: Feb 2013
About this poem:
felt thrilling to do some amateur poetry! it's just an example of loss, no real story here hehe

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beautifulyou
Well, for 'amateur' writing this is pretty darn good! thumbs up

I really like how you blended contemporary phrases with ancient imagary,
"Embracing the magician in her moves,
The silence that followed the door
Rocked me like a helpless lamb."
morgen90210
nice take
welcome aboard
Rassmad7
thanks alot for the comments and much respect to the poets out there. the last part was a pleasure to put together
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