Graceful and collected she packed, Standing on one heel, a tut and shrug. No recourse for these actions, She vowed to never slop up this slack, Forgetting all hearts she started, Piercing the void, every step clicked Deep into his brain, her scent Embracing the magician in her moves, The silence that followed the door Rocked me like a helpless lamb.
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Posted: Feb 2013
About this poem:
felt thrilling to do some amateur poetry! it's just an example of loss, no real story here hehe
Well, for 'amateur' writing this is pretty darn good!
I really like how you blended contemporary phrases with ancient imagary, "Embracing the magician in her moves, The silence that followed the door Rocked me like a helpless lamb."
morgen90210singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeFeb 13, 2013
nice take welcome aboard
Rassmad7OPLondon, Greater London, England UKFeb 13, 2013
thanks alot for the comments and much respect to the poets out there. the last part was a pleasure to put together
Comments (3)
I really like how you blended contemporary phrases with ancient imagary,
"Embracing the magician in her moves,
The silence that followed the door
Rocked me like a helpless lamb."
welcome aboard