How words can twist and turn. lol

I have been working on a small piece of writing to describe the feelings of the first time a rider gets on a young horse and the connection that developes between them. The piece was ready to be sent out along with a photo for publication in a local newsletter.


First Ride

Raw amber honey,
vanilla cream.
Young, taut muscle
lacking memory
to impede.

Confusion and wonder
are seen in his eyes.
Working so hard
to decide.

Each step
a journey.
Guess the answer.
Good try.

Curiosity, youth,
trust and
a kind heart.
Serve him well
on his first start.

Movements lengthen
then withdraw.
Softness invades
neck, back and jaw.

Big sighs
release in
tandem from each.
As the perfect day
is now complete.


Verthandi 7/23/07


Upon reviewing it, I think I am going to have to start over. Depending on the state of mind of the reader....this could also be talking about a young, inexperienced lover....oops.