It's better than some stuff I've read on here. It is yours to edit as you see fit, you own it. I have a few poems I've changed many times over the years. You may feel like expanding it too.
I agree with mom, but, when you're writing a poem about true emotions, don't be afraid to slash conformity, sometimes free verse helps keep your heart on paper, and not just your mind.....
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My mind wanders from day to day,
Wondering if you'll ask me to stay.
When I finally hear those words,
It will make my heart soar like flying birds.
Your arms will embrace me and hold me tight,
As we sleep in each others arms every night.
Our love will grow stronger as time passes by,
And will continue to grow until we die.