I sit alone in this dark room, Waiting for it to become my tomb. As soon as i get the nerve, This blade will truley serve, Its devine purpose. As the crimson blood spills, My pain, which it kills, Will be forever gone.
xjennxox..... you are AMAZING ME with your incredible talent for writing!!! At first, I wasn't so impressed by the poems you were posting, as I saw room for much improvement.... however, the last two poems you've shared are INCREDIBLE and worthy of being called PROFESSIONAL!!!
Now, let me ask you a favor..... please DO NOT follow the instructions of this very brilliantly but DARK written piece!!!
Give us more! (But try to 'lighten up' on the context!!!) You're scaring me!!!
SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKJun 27, 2011
Great poem and beautiful colors with it... Do hope it's words only, and not actions... you have a great writing ability there
RedexNorthumberland, England UKJun 27, 2011
This was a dark poem, my first thoughts were everlasting pain for those left behind. Then on how well it was writen and the moments in thought caught so well. Then how alone so alone the person must have felt. So wow that certainly twisted a whole lot of thought. Next thought I do hope this is only a poem????
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Now, let me ask you a favor..... please DO NOT follow the instructions of this very brilliantly but DARK written piece!!!
Give us more! (But try to 'lighten up' on the context!!!) You're scaring me!!!
Do hope it's words only, and not actions... you have a great writing ability there
Next thought I do hope this is only a poem????