The winding lane twists and turns as it meanders up hill and down dale stretching far ahead, a silvery thread glistening and glinting beckoning me on
Peaceful countryside noises abound in the air cooing of woodpigeons, rapid tapping of woodpecker raucous cries of rooks nesting in the trees nearby low mooing of cows and bleats from the young lambs
As I journey onwards beneath the vibrant blues skies I come to a brow and there stretched out before me a landscape so picture perfect it moves me to tears verdant hues of green from the meadows scent filled air
This is where I want to be and to grow gracefully old to put down my roots and settle in this peaceful vale to wake each day to the glories of nature each different something new to catch my eye and fill me with delight
A place to rest with natures bounteous treasures spread to revive a weary soul to heal the ravishes of every day life
It is like you have took all these words, mixed them in a bag and slapped them out on a page. There is no need to introduce complexity into poetry just for the sake of it or because a word sounds nice!
CelticPoet12Prescott, Arizona USAJul 20, 2013
Language so full of possibilities. I'm here to celebrate the written word, not pierce a hole in anyone's creative process. I liked your piece Shadow. Those who haven't anything nice to say, shouldn't say anything at all. Ignore em.
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 20, 2013
hi celtic nice to see you yes they are beneath contempt lol ty for enjoying
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKJul 20, 2013
Get a life, Mr 1983. I feel so sorry for you, the fact that you can't write poetry must pain you.
One of the greatest abilities in life is to be able to take criticism, especially when it comes to writing.Can Shadow write poetry better than me? Of course. But I'm just been honest. If she can understand what I'm saying, she might actually learn something from it.
Hi, shadow1950, The winding lane..., a silvery thread glistening and glinting beckoning me on... It's nice when Whimsical Thoughts can lead one to a place that can revive a weary soul to heal the ravishes of every day life. Thanks for sharing.
Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoJul 21, 2013
I always loved this poem dear friend.You are an excellent poet and I truly adore all what you have to share.The critique is not qualified to make a critical assessment of any of your poems....just remember that.Warm love and greetings sent to you my dear and keep those poems coming.Hugs
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 21, 2013
Mr 1983 I see you write blogs not poetry. As a several times contest winner and published I do just about know what I am doing yes this may be a bit long winded but the joy is in the words themselves
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 21, 2013
ty Chrissie for standing up for me I found the banter/swords drawn quite funny to read again ty
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 21, 2013
dearest M.M ty although I am not in the slightest bit upset everyone is entitled to a view and Mr1978 is entitled to his. As you know I build pictures with words sometimes I fail lol
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 21, 2013
Hi shadow, Really enjoyed this read as I always enjoy your poetry. I'm glad mr. big mouth didn't get you down. You didn't fail in this piece at all. Catch you later. MIKE.
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 22, 2013
hi Mick we all write bum poems from time to time and I would be 1st to agree that this lacks somewhat I missed my mark. That aside it's an honest portrayal of my feelings of that day. ty for reading
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this is artful poem
at its best
thank you
hope your pup is doing well?
The winding lane..., a silvery thread glistening and glinting beckoning me on... It's nice when Whimsical Thoughts can lead one to a place that can revive a weary soul to heal the ravishes of every day life. Thanks for sharing.
Really enjoyed this read as I always enjoy your poetry. I'm glad mr. big mouth didn't get you down. You didn't fail in this piece at all.
Catch you later.
MIKE.