Cold winter morning, i now turn on the heat Everything's got cold in here, even my favourite seat Why does it take so long to feel warm, my toes begin to freeze My body begins to slowly shut down, as i hold myself and squeeze
My fingers have gone numb, my breath is getting fast I close my eyes and change my mind, thinking of the past My toes are numb and blue, as i put them near the fire But its to cold and impossible, to feel what i desire
My skin is pale, I am losing feeling, my eyes begin to close I'm trying to stay awake cos if i close them, then who knows I slide to the floor with no control, and i am lay up on my back I am starting to black out a bit, i feel im having an attack
I am in a state of despiration and suffer, what am i gonna do I cant move a muscle in my body, alomost like i'm stuck with glue I close my eyes and keep them shut, ive given it all i have got Then wake a little later......holy shit this rooms to hot!!!
That was really good! That is me all over! I am freezing all the time - need heat and clothes, clothes and heat!! ...especially in this Scottish winter!
As I read your poem, I thought...that guy has experienced hypothermia, and I wondered where it was going... just loved the ending!!
Well done!
Tiger_DanOPwarrington, Merseyside, England UKDec 8, 2009
thanks for the comments...........mmm scottish weather must get BAD!!!!! lol
Tiger_DanOPwarrington, Merseyside, England UKDec 10, 2009
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As I read your poem, I thought...that guy has experienced hypothermia, and I wondered where it was going... just loved the ending!!
Well done!