my first poem

my first poem here it is
learnt from others its fair & ease
do some gramatical mistakes and put similar soundin words at the last of every sentence
your poem is ready, others will appreciate.

if possible, play around the word love in the poem
because millions of broken heart, lookin for love like those stuff
those who hv true love, has no time to read poems,
they will be busy with loved ones, instead of CS

try to go deep in ur poem
show love, birth, death and tears
let the reader feel the fear
u r a good poet o my dear