FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKOct 2, 2011
Hi halakala
This would appear to be your first poem on here, and you have got off to a great start with this... You make great use of analogy and metaphor in this poem. An enjoyable read.
Best wishes
Bill
halakalaOPkatowice, Silesia PolandOct 2, 2011
Bill...
once agin,thank you very much:)
Volcano_21istanbul, Marmara TurkeyOct 2, 2011
good
Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoOct 2, 2011
Hi Halakala,i enjoyed reading this lovely piece of writing,thanks for sharing M.M
Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoOct 2, 2011
Hi again,very rude of me to forget, ''Welcome To Poets Corner''
halakalaOPkatowice, Silesia PolandOct 2, 2011
Hello POET...
thank you very very much:) It is very nice that you have noticed my 'modest' poem It is my 'first time' and I am happy to join here:)
P.S.I have to look at yours...:)
vyoletaArkaroola, South Australia AustraliaOct 2, 2011
Welcome, halakala. I like your poem written from your sincerest feelings, put in a beautiful form and style. I see that we are going to have great reads from you. Congrats.
halakalaOPkatowice, Silesia PolandOct 2, 2011
Thank you very much YvIOLETa,
by the way, I have written this poem when I fell in love with some amazing Frenchman...
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKOct 2, 2011
Excellent first poem on CS.
cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USAOct 2, 2011
Super sweet and lovely. A beautiful easy flow. Please write many more of such..
Odette..thank you very much... I have to look at yours, but it takes time to analyse them..the contents/meaning /,poetical figures and so on..I know something about it because of my university profession...
halakalaOPkatowice, Silesia PolandOct 2, 2011
Cafetwo..thank you very much for your comments:) As a poet,you know,how difficult is to write a good poem...
halakalaOPkatowice, Silesia PolandOct 2, 2011
Cloudy..thank you too:) it is important to have nice applause for the first time:) I do appreciate it:)
Comments (17)
This would appear to be your first poem on here, and you have got off to a great start with this... You make great use of analogy and metaphor in this poem. An enjoyable read.
Best wishes
Bill
once agin,thank you very much:)
thank you very very much:)
It is very nice that you have noticed my 'modest' poem
It is my 'first time' and I am happy to join here:)
P.S.I have to look at yours...:)
by the way, I have written this poem when I fell in love with some amazing Frenchman...
I have to look at yours,
but it takes time to analyse them..the contents/meaning /,poetical figures and so on..I know something about it because of my university profession...
As a poet,you know,how difficult is to write a good poem...
it is important to have nice applause for the first time:)
I do appreciate it:)
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Sweet fruit
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And taste It
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