Oh, you made me feel this! I need a jacket! All this graven-black-breathlessness has me gasping!
Really enjoyed this! Well done...
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKMay 30, 2013
hi Dear M.M ty so much I find although hard to write I do love villanelles and me who hated rhyme lol I have to say you are right it does get easier lol again ty dear friend
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKMay 30, 2013
hi Cailin gashing is good lol happy it made you feel that way ty for reading
rapturecapturekerry, Kerry IrelandMay 30, 2013
Hi Shadow
You are very gifted, and always a joy to read.
Beautiful and haunting loved it.. Thank you for sharing
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKMay 30, 2013
hi Martina ty for your lovely comments glad you enjoyed it
john17021984campbelltown, New South Wales AustraliaJun 30, 2013
Hi Linda, I like the erie silence it has atmosphere, I would have added a surprise of a train screaming out of a tunnel like a steam engine being near you in the dead of night the shrill sound could have been it's whistle as it approaches you, it would sound almost ghostly, well maybe you can use it in another of your poems, I don't mind. all the best...John
shadow1950OPtaunton, Somerset, England UKJul 1, 2013
hi John very strict rules to villanelle's be difficult to fit train whistle in ty for the thought though
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The fine tradition of a villanelle being upheld. I prefer the terzanelle variation but you have made a very fine effort here.
Well done lady shadow1950 enjoyed!...
if you or anyone is interested in learning other forms
again tnx
Really enjoyed this! Well done...
You are very gifted, and always a joy to read.
Beautiful and haunting loved it..
Thank you for sharing