rear fang

by darkhorse555Donegal, Ireland

Aug 2013 603 Views 19 comments

rear fang

Crawling lies
like a snake
in ambushing
You bite me
on the back

Nesting asleep
On the chest
The circle of life
Searching the warmth within,

upon the heat
Crocodile tears
Wiped away my smile
Coldness in what you done

Sinking the fangs
From the darkness
off your soul
Deep into my heart

The blood turns black in lies
In the multitude of sins,
biting in the back
Through venomous words
Poisoning the mind

Killing me slowly
Apple in the eye
Totally
Without doubt
Rotten

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Posted: Aug 2013

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Comments (19)

Spartacus2012Biloxi, Mississippi USAAug 3, 2013

Nice write Liam..Watch out for those poisonous species...Ken

kidmenotusa, Washington USAAug 3, 2013

liam lies truly do destroy even if they are ment to spare feelings as when the truth comes out it causes discontent and bewillderment, At least the truth only hurts some times and wont destroy one soul. great write as always

weemick1960Fife, Scotland UKAug 3, 2013

Hi Liam,
Another good one pal,
You always got to watch out for those snakes. Some are safe, some are not. I can't do with people who lie. If someone has something to say, just be honest, say it outright.
Enjoyed the read.
Catch you later Liam,
Your friend,
MIKE.

niah9Auckland, New ZealandAug 3, 2013

oh dear......love what I see as the subject....wonder if I am right....but great write....Kathy

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKAug 4, 2013

Hi Liam

Another cathartic write - and though the pain is palpable when we've experienced betrayal, maybe allowing someone else to reduce us to words of bitterness too often is counter productive, and a barrier to picking ourselves up, dusting ourselves down and starting all over again...

All the best buddy.

Bill

Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoAug 4, 2013

Vehement images come to mind when I read this piece Liam.Well penned

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandAug 14, 2013

ken thank you ever so much for the ever so beautiful comment deeply appreciated

shadow1950taunton, Somerset, England UKAug 14, 2013

how did I miss this gem lovely Liam

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandSep 7, 2013

in cases were lies are concerned truth becomes tainted with the lie wonderful comment deeply appreciated

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandSep 7, 2013

thank you ever so much mick for the beautiful comment my friend deeply appreciated

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandSep 25, 2013

niah thank you for the very beautiful comment deeply appreciated

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandOct 16, 2013

bill thank you for the wonderful comment deeply appreciated

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandOct 16, 2013

odette thank you deeply wonderful comment greatly appreciated

RedexNorthumberland, England UKOct 16, 2013

certainly not killing softly

Hope this was not real for you. Dare I say, I enjoyed your turns of phrase in all your poetry.
Wear plated armour like a knight next time.

darkhorse555OPdonegal, Donegal IrelandNov 25, 2013

mm thank you dear friend for the wonderful comment deeply appreciated

sundayrose1san francisco, California USANov 25, 2013

Let me tell you about this kind of story Liam, at least to me, generates the deepest pondering sometimes. It just worms into your system, why do we have to go through hell to find out what the real truth is? But ah well, it is life dear friend and you just have to ride with it, I guess.

Nevertheless....the whole world is littered by such a creature..So beautiful on the outside until you see what's buried deep within.

Thanks for the read

SR