You who demolish me, you whom I love, be near me. Remain near me when evening, drunk on the blood of skies, becomes night, in the other a sword sheathed in the diamond of stars. Be near me when night laments or sings, or when it begins to dance, its stell-blue anklets ringing with grief. Be here when longings, long submerged in the heart’s waters, resurface and everyone begins to look: Where is the assasin? In whose sleeve is hidden the redeeming knife? And when wine, as it is poured, is the sobbing of children whom nothing will console– when nothing holds, when nothing is: at that dark hour when night mourns, be near me, my destroyer, my lover me, be near me.
zeeshanr, Painful it is to love "A Lover-Destroyer" ...I love my country too!...but it is a "Destroyer of the Innocent"! I feel you. Again, A "WONDERFULLY POIGNANT WRITE"! Robert
It does smack a bit of Tennyson, not the same but very close genre. i give the benefit of the doubt, but it does seem far too wordly for a 19 year old. If I am wrong and you have not plaguarised others work by changing things a bit then I apologise. But be vey careful that people on here are very knowledgeable. Rob
What a coincidence. ...I dont care what I think either. A quick Google search for Aiz Ahmed Aiz reveals the true author of at least some, if not all of your "inspiration".....its wrong to steal.
zeeshanr, I must agree with Rob, your poem has an "Air" of Tennyson, but to your favor, I find no plagiarizing here... but, as a friend, my advise is, "be very careful"...but also, the more you write, the more you will develop your own unique style. But I will say this also, although I find nothing to indicate that plagiarizing is in play, tho' well versed in, I am not an expert on Tennyson, and Rob and candykid are two very knowledgeable poets that, if I were you, "I'd heed their comments. Robert
Faiz Ahmed Faiz......Google it. .......stealing large blocks poetry written long ago and changing a few words here and there is just wrong. It hurts to be exposed.
I thought I knew you, it was something in your manner and the poems of course NERO the poems were well above your years. worms out of the woodwork that's a poem of mine long ago too
Ladies & Gents..."Would it not be nice if we could just hate the deed and not the troubled, young human being"?...and hope he will have grasped the "MAGNITUDE" of his "FOLLY" (?).
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 26, 2014
Do you think the person is cosha then robert Have good evening my friend
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 26, 2014
Odette our lady peace keeper does he not remind you of Nero the translater.????? I just hate it when people lie oh I forgive him
No Johanna he is not our our friend Neo, he wrote he's own stuff and always credited where he had translated, I miss him he was an intelligent man with a great thirst for literature. True what Odette says, I have wondered for a while that i thought he's work was far too worldy for a 19 year old, but gave him the benefit of the doubt. Rob
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 26, 2014
Thank you for that rob Nero did do translation work, and yes he was very intelligent with a dark side too. That taught me a rude lesson on the internet. I stopped writing for 6 months. Yes I did think 19 was very young for his writing style and candy was good to spot it, too but I hate self righteous people too, well hate is a bit strong despise the falseness. Oh well the corner has peaceful times and discord, nothing changes.
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 26, 2014
Neo this poem is now getting more credits each comment this is called whats the word
Christian, Am not trying to be anyone's "Champion" "God knows I lost my "Honor" many years ago!...just ask for tolerance...there is just too much dissention, much of which is my doing, and I know how I feel...am just imparting my "Empathy"...that's all.
True honor lies in truth. No one expects you to be a champion. I haven't seen anyone reveal themselves here as honestly as yourself. .....even when it seems to be at your disadvantage. .....this is what I admire about you.
WOW!!! Just like me, whomever you are... "You Will Pay...for your sins" OBTW-YOU ARE SHAMELESS & SHAMEFUL!
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 27, 2014
Knew it just knew it a nutter at large mmm who could it be. Well had to be knowledgable to even pick poems and then alter a bit to stay within the law. Well I have read some beautiful poetry so something good came out of it for me plus my instincts still sharp. But now I go hunting the kill they say is sweet Just sorry you hold grudge to people and a bit sick to sit back and watch good hearted people trying to make you welcome. You maybe should be knocking loudly on the door of sanity
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKMar 27, 2014
What a shame . I didn't have this much fun before. I really like it.
If people saying bad things about you, the good part of this is they are talking about you.
You are dead right- I preach this to my kids and Grandkids- I tell them - No one likes to be ignored. Well done you - Who ever the hell you are.
RedexNorthumberland, England UKMar 27, 2014
Odette you don't teach your kids to be sneaky to get attention, fool good people
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKMar 27, 2014
Ah Yes
Personally I prefer the measured responses of TruroRob and Odette - rather than the pack wolf mentality of those who are so gleefully slicing up a teenager, who happens to be daft enough to nick someone else's work (or at least parts of it).
It most make people feel so self righteous to be so much holier than thou.
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Painful it is to love "A Lover-Destroyer"
...I love my country too!...but it is a "Destroyer of the Innocent"!
I feel you.
Again, A "WONDERFULLY POIGNANT WRITE"!
Robert
Are you know my friend. there are many things in this world we don't know. And i don't think we can ever be able understand them.Love is one of them.
Rob
Anyway every one has their own freedom of speech. so i don't care what you think.
And Thanks for comments.
And thanks for advice but i allready know that all the members are more knowledgeable then me.
Anyway thanks for your comments.
I must agree with Rob, your poem has an "Air" of Tennyson,
but to your favor, I find no plagiarizing here...
but, as a friend,
my advise is, "be very careful"...but also, the more you write, the more you will develop your own unique style.
But I will say this also, although I find nothing to indicate that plagiarizing is in play, tho' well versed in, I am not an expert on Tennyson, and Rob and candykid are two very knowledgeable poets that, if I were you, "I'd heed their comments.
Robert
worms out of the woodwork that's a poem of mine long ago too
Rob
Yes I did think 19 was very young for his writing style and candy was good to spot it, too but I hate self righteous people too, well hate is a bit strong despise the falseness.
Oh well the corner has peaceful times and discord, nothing changes.
Am not trying to be anyone's "Champion" "God knows I lost my "Honor" many years ago!...just ask for tolerance...there is just too much dissention, much of which is my doing, and I know how I feel...am just imparting my "Empathy"...that's all.
Just like me, whomever you are...
"You Will Pay...for your sins"
OBTW-YOU ARE SHAMELESS & SHAMEFUL!
Well I have read some beautiful poetry so something good came out of it for me plus my instincts still sharp. But now I go hunting the kill they say is sweet
Just sorry you hold grudge to people and a bit sick to sit back and watch good hearted people trying to make you welcome.
You maybe should be knocking loudly on the door of sanity
If people saying bad things about you, the good part of this is they are talking about you.
You are dead right- I preach this to my kids and Grandkids- I tell them - No one likes to be ignored. Well done you - Who ever the hell you are.
Personally I prefer the measured responses of TruroRob and Odette - rather than the pack wolf mentality of those who are so gleefully slicing up a teenager, who happens to be daft enough to nick someone else's work (or at least parts of it).
It most make people feel so self righteous to be so much holier than thou.
Bill
Are you missing me. hahaha...
I am sorry but i couldn't stop my self to doing comments.
I couldn't control my laugh on your guessing why did i done that. it,s really very funny.
Anyway if you want to know why i did this thing you can ask me.