Letters
Author: Unknown
Dark tresses brush the sill, slightly,
Face tilted, tantalisingly, toward the street.
Always this pensive position, hands held tightly
Shoulders hunched,eyes wide, dress neat.
A black bicycle, the humm-click of chain,
Emerges to exist under a soft, street lamps, light.
Shapes, indistinct, call gently through soft rain,
A delicate sonance, as day disperses night.
The oil lamp, on the bed stand, glows,
Casting silent shadows in a single room.
An antique rocking chair, restfull in repose,
Forget-me-not's, on the mantle, in full bloom.
An opened, re-read letter, on an un-slept-in bed,
'We are sorry to inform you'...
She glances at it, eyes quiet,
nothing to be said.
The window swings quietly shut, closed to the day.
Breaking the rocking chairs recline, she sits, un-feeling.
And with tired eyes watches the flickering lamp light play,
a silent symphony, across their one room's ceiling.
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Posted: Jan 2010
About this poem:
O.K so this is my first poetry post and i'm not sure what to expect from it so any feedback or criticism would be great.
Comments (5)
rob
The only thing I think would improve this is to remove as much punctuation as you can to keep the reader from stopping too much, keep them flowing through to the end without pauses.
Bravo.
(I hope you don't mind my comment but this is so good I just had to)