Drive Thru

by daradloffPlatteville, Wisconsin, USA

Sep 30 221 Views 3 comments

Mello Yello Pop
Burger King Drive Thru Waiting
Twenty Minutes Long

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Posted: Sep 30

Another haiku, I used to work fast food from 10/88 - 1/93, and I never had to work the drive thru.

southmiami4321Tampa, Florida USAOct 1

There you go....but go to some poetry sites they will give you lessons for free..SM

Mizzy4Navan, Meath IrelandOct 1

This poem is really a Senryu, daradloff
Good to see you trying out new forms.
The 5/7/5 syllable count is perfect.

Mick.

southmiami4321Tampa, Florida USAOct 1

Mizzy is right daradloff. Haiku addresses nature and senryu speaks human nature but both similar in the syllables count. Good one by the way. SM

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