well justin I think you're said it pretty well, did ya try them words on her? Must say I didn't care for the color combination though...old eyes need easy colors ;-)
caroljoyceManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKJun 15, 2010
I really liked this, well expressed with great flow and rhyme. I think you are a good writer. I hope you don't mind my agreeing with the old man above re the colours.Also it would read easier if you split it into shorter lines.
caroljoyceManchester, Greater Manchester, England UKJun 15, 2010
I really liked this, well expressed with great flow and rhyme. I think you are a good writer. I hope you don't mind my agreeing with the old man above re the colours.Also it would read easier if you split it into shorter lines.
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I hope you don't mind my agreeing with the old man above re the colours.Also it would read easier if you split it into shorter lines.
I hope you don't mind my agreeing with the old man above re the colours.Also it would read easier if you split it into shorter lines.