Perhaps that’s bothers me most Haunting and hunting for me as a ghost She had to have known I’d end up injured Yet ignored what I had suffered and endured
I put up with promises I knew were secretive dreams I put up with wondering if the lady is what she seems My second nature obviously beat the s**t out of my first And not only that but second nature did its f*****g worst
She must have known my body, spirit and mind would fall apart I have too much compassion and soul within my heart So I provided what she needed with no price, bill or fee But she had to have known the last man to do this to was me
Tiger_Danwarrington, Merseyside, England UKJul 29, 2011
Hi, You write and put it together very well.....only the frame around your work isnt the best........just trying to help with ur 'headings'.....keep the titles and just the writing. I like
andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKJul 29, 2011
I read it!...and here's the thing...I actually enjoyed it too...lol Seriously though...Good write Free...Thankyou...Andrew...
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKJul 29, 2011
This is a very fast moving poetry corner, there are just so many poems to read. Fiveteen poems are rather a lot, I would not put so many on at one time, then I am sure people will read them.
Best wishes
silentspringFjälkinge, Skane SwedenJul 29, 2011
You are for sure not a sunny pic-nic free! You are the unpredictable clouds lurking behind the mountains, one never know, do they come with thunder and storms or just pass silently.
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Seriously though...Good write Free...Thankyou...Andrew...
Best wishes
However, your poems do rock my boat!!!