Dimly do you see them as they stride toward you through the densest fog.. You have taken hostage a dozen maidens.. But you have signed a covent with death.. Beware! They come as grim reapers to claim your soul.. They come.. for you! Now take your sword to your own throat.. Surely the stallion hooves have sounded the death knell.. Surely your heart faints for fear.. For your tormented faces shall be reflected in the burnished shields as the knights of Diamond castle fall upon you And our maidens shall dance upon your graves~
windyweatherlySan Francisco, California USAMay 2, 2012
Wowwhat a tribute to valor Jim this is sad in a way because in the he ends up a victim oh his own strength
But his heroism is unnoted
Phyllis
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USAMay 2, 2012
Ty Windy' Sometimes we just gotta saddle up dear..
CelticPoet12Prescott, Arizona USAMay 4, 2012
Cafe, nice work here. I love period pieces, as I have stated in other poems of a similar flavor. Some wonderful images here that a strong and real. My only suggestion might be to use the word BEWARE instead of watch out, which is a more modern term and for a moment it pulled me out of the setting you created. It sounds more forboding to me I guess. Just sayin' and sayin' it with ultimate respect and love for the craft. Thank you for sharing and blessings to you!~
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USAMay 5, 2012
TY Celtic' You are most correct about that word dear..I shall make an immediate adjustment and then go straight to bed without my jello..
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKMay 6, 2012
What would we do without you cafe...Another good wtite...Your imagination amazes me
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But his heroism is unnoted
Phyllis