Contained Kickits Challenge

by jazzy75Houston, Texas, USA

Jul 2012 929 Views 20 comments

Contained ~ Kickit’s ChallengeAuthor: jazzy75
A thousand steps,
walking a crooked fence, 
full of barbs,
wires, and hacked limbs.
~ ~ ~ ~ ~
Posted: Jul 2012
About this poem:Thanks for the challenge kickit.....

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Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoJul 2, 2012

I see you met the challenge well,such simple words but yet so rich in meaning

M.M

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 2, 2012

Thanks Poetnumber1....the fence has not been the friendliest creation for many...especially the wild mustangs in America.

kickit22auburn, Washington USAJul 2, 2012

ahhhh Jazzy, I love it. this has so much meaning in life's struggles, think all can relate to this. thank you for your contribution.

kick.

MottaMantua, Lombardy ItalyJul 2, 2012

You did broke the ice, Jazzy!

Within your kindness you let me bear the crown for a while and I must admit it felt good! I'll just give it back to the queen!

Majestic meaning, Your Majesty!

kickit22auburn, Washington USAJul 2, 2012

ahhhh Motta, so kind of you!. but honestly I don't think she broke it, just between me and you I think it actually was melted.

lucy1777Broken Arrow Oklahoma, Oklahoma USAJul 2, 2012

Good job Jazzy!

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 2, 2012

Hi kickit....and a big thanks to you....for being the father of the challenge.....it has produced many awesome poems...that are all unique and worthy of greatness. Big hugs my friend.

I'm glad you enjoyed my little contribution.

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 2, 2012

Motta.....I am humbled....and in no need of a crown.

CelticPoet12Prescott, Arizona USAJul 2, 2012

Good job Jazzy girl!~ Way to go. Yay for challenges!~ Blessings, Celtic!~

MottaMantua, Lombardy ItalyJul 2, 2012

Then...Rise Lady Jazzy!

Rise and...hand back the crown to me!

Instead you can have the shape of my heart. I mean, crown!

Or word?

Perhaps...dream?

Aaaa...fire!

You can have my fire!

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 2, 2012

Here you go dear sir....a melted crown in the shape of a heart. May it be treasured for years and years to come.

...thanks for the fire....I will carry the torch....and light the path....one by one.

cherryreggaebayside, New York USAJul 2, 2012

Deep write jazzy ....thank you for sharing.

I'm a lil late on your challenge, but I will get to it

windyweatherlySan Francisco, California USAJul 2, 2012

great one Jazzy did you go and pump iron to overcome the barb?

love it Jazz

Phyllis

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 3, 2012

Thanks kickit....fire and ice don't mix...oh no...they sizzle!

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 3, 2012

Thanks Lucy....glad you enjoyed :)

jazzy75OPHouston, Texas USAJul 3, 2012

Thanks Celtic....It was a great challenge....I just loved seeing what all the poets came up with. A heartfull thanks to our one and only kickit!!

Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKJul 3, 2012

A thousand steps,
walking a crooked fence,
full of barbs,
wires, and hacked limbs.

What a picture you paint with so few words Jazzy...The hardest poems to write and get a message across are the short poems.

CelticPoet12Prescott, Arizona USAJul 5, 2012

Hey Jazzy girl, I SO agree with what you said. YAY KickIt. Yay CS poets. Wonderful job. I like the other comments made here about your piece. Celtic

SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 31, 2014

Oh my!!!!(on 2 things - 1.I can't believe it's taken 2 years to make good on my promise: to comment on other's Kickit Challenge)

and
2.Wow!!Wow!!! Great write, huge impact - I was not expecting that at all, ouch, ouch, ouch, graphic!!!!!

Absolutely loved reading this, Jazzy!!!!!

SCatlyn

SCatlynBrecon, South Glamorgan, Wales UKAug 31, 2014

P.S.Just read your comment about the wild mustangs and fences in general - didn't know about the horses, so will pay more attention to issues regarding them.
In general, can so relate - been in the emergency room with my son b/c of one that broke in the middle while he was retrieving a ball.

Once again, loved it & great job!!!

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