The words you need to hear Are trapped behind my teeth My tongue tightly holding on to emotions that confuse and excite and flame and ignite Causing explosions in my nerves that shake my foundation
I slip into your smile choke on the words that fill my mouth I hold back to hold on And I ask you now Is that so wrong? Because when I sing I sing your song And it sounds so good to me
These feelings that could pull my tears Send them raining down against my smile We both know its been a while So don't be scared Because if you need that sweet release I'd cut my tongue and break my teeth
Blizza - intense poem...love the way you write with so much feeling behind the words. There is a richness and depth to your poetry that I just love
paloma66Manukau, Auckland New ZealandJan 19, 2010
Go on Honey rant & rave as much as you want.It helps release the pent up emotions I do the same when I sink into an abyss of despair I pick up my pen and pour my feelings out on the pad, aaah! you wont believe it brings such relief.Writing is a way of escape for storming emotions.When you speak at times it goes out the window not into someone's ears,but when you write people get to know your real feelings.It helps it really does my grandson is the same when fire courses in his veins he gets inside his room and starts writing, all his anger is depicted in his poems, then he comes out quite satisfied with himself.All the best to you.
Thanks Blizza, I agree with you, a poem comes as a thought or something you see and you take it from there. Poetry cannot be forced it is either there or it is not, then the mind and heart spill out the words. I understood why the intensity of the last line was needed to emphasise the poems meaning, I always enjoy your work because it comes from your emotions which are always very strong. No emotions no good poetry is how I think. Keep writing!! rob
Blizza801OPBillings, Montana USAMar 1, 2010
I'm glad to know that others understand where Im coming from. I really do appreciate that you all take the time to read my words. I know my poetry is not for everybody and If I posted them on some elite poetry site they would tear my work a part because of some form or rule I'm not following...but it feels good to know that you all actually take in what I write rather then blast me for not following traditional rules of poetry.
nicki_loveoriginally from Venus, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoMar 2, 2010
I love this poem.. its the first I've read from you.. and it makes me want to read more! Good job!
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rob
I agree with you, a poem comes as a thought or something you see and you take it from there.
Poetry cannot be forced it is either there or it is not, then the mind and heart spill out the words.
I understood why the intensity of the last line was needed to emphasise the poems meaning, I always enjoy your work because it comes from your emotions which are always very strong. No emotions no good poetry is how I think.
Keep writing!!
rob
I really do appreciate that you all take the time to read my words. I know my poetry is not for everybody and If I posted them on some elite poetry site they would tear my work a part because of some form or rule I'm not following...but it feels good to know that you all actually take in what I write rather then blast me for not following traditional rules of poetry.