In endless space we float Everyone of us.. Incased in our own private translucent sphere Slowly we move through time like molasses in a thick impenetrable void I can see you through my sphere but I cannot touch you and you cannot touch me There are billions of us ocassionally bumping one anothers spheres and moving in whatever direction.. We are lost in time if there is such a thing Perhaps we have measured time by our pain but it doesn't matter What matters is that we have awakened to a consciousness finding ourselves imprisoned in this elastic sphere that shall float in a suspended sea of eternal blackness.. From our spheres we can only hear one another in inaudible tones.. I see your tears.. I feel your fears.. I can only cry out these words to you..'I love you,' and when I speak those words an intense light radiates from within your sphere and you become a star!
An imaginative write about how we are separated from each other and how our lives bump occasionally, if lucky, to transform and be transformed. Even when in love we are enclosed in the prison of everyday life, circumstances, distance, what not! We can do nothing, but watch each other with longing and attempt to get our voice through the barrier, and when and if we succeed we have love as a reward of love lighting souls. Enjoyed the poem very much, many thanks for sharing!
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty niah..' Thanks much dear.
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty GirlBillie..' Thank you dear..
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty Marakia..' Many points of view can be garnered from the simple methphors here and you have captured the essence quite nicely and have pretty much spelled out my meaning. Thanks kindly dear..
thelmatallaGeneva, SwitzerlandNov 13, 2011
Another excellent write Cafe. Each one of us have the atoms of a star according to some scientific studies. Beautifully expressed, an outstanding piece!
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKNov 13, 2011
Hi Cafe
You have posted the most thoughtful of narratives, a most original write...
Best wishes
Bill
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty Thelma.. Just trying to suggest that with love we radiate as stars..Thank you again.
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty Thelma.. Just trying to suggest that with love we radiate as stars..Thank you again.
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty Mr. Fellsman..' This was a fun kind of play with space-time and existence..
swedish_nightmarglenwood, Alberta CanadaNov 13, 2011
dark nebulas silhouette stars but still radiate light , love is the light , nice cafe a star man as well
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 13, 2011
Ty Swedish..' Most kind of you my friend. Thanks for stopping by.
AyhraAdelaide, South Australia AustraliaNov 14, 2011
Different, yes. But very nice Caffe2
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKNov 14, 2011
In endless space we float Everyone of us.. Incased in our own private translucent sphere
Bravo dear cafe for such an excellent dark poem.
Maxeen_1YORK, North Yorkshire, England UKNov 14, 2011
The reason for stars by: cafetwo2010 Very beautiful cafe expressive write making one feel suspended giving a floating feeling of lost in time..luved it! thanks for sharing.. your talanted write,
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 14, 2011
Ty Ayhra..' Peace dear..Thanks much.
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 14, 2011
Ty Odette..Need a flashlight up in this joint..
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 14, 2011
Ty Odette..Need a flashlight up in this joint..
cafetwo2010OPHarford county, Maryland USANov 14, 2011
Ty Maxeen..' Thanks dear. I can see you from my bubble..We might bump.
Comments (20)
Great too...Kathy
You have posted the most thoughtful of narratives, a most original write...
Best wishes
Bill
we float
Everyone of us..
Incased in our own
private translucent
sphere
Bravo dear cafe for such an excellent dark poem.
Very beautiful cafe expressive write making one feel suspended
giving a floating feeling of lost in time..luved it!
thanks for sharing.. your talanted write,