Undertow

by fjamesj9701DunkinDonuts, Florida, USA

Dec 2012 1,011 Views 28 comments

Undertow

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My shadow has been shedding skin
Ive been thinking it smells again
Clear out my insides and follow through
I owe myself a new device to choose
The super nova of a velvet sun
My oh my it seems the darkness won
It's been stalking me with every step I take
I don't need to hear your whispers for every choice I make
There is no more hopeless, this is what it is
Ive been treading on that fault line now its sink or swim
Then take a deep breath and dive into the undertow
Hell you've followed me for so long its time to throw some blows
Up down ~ turning me inside out
Is hope just delightful thinking or something that wears me down
So please dear angels, will you pull me back in
Ive struggled enough inside this current
now its time to make hell my b*tch

~ JJF ~

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Posted: Dec 2012

About this poem:

I hope everyone that reads this is having a really good day. And if you are not, just know that in every minute that passes you have an opportunity to change that… Cheers

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beautifulyouNew York, USADec 12, 2012

"So please dear angels will you pull me back in"

Angel here, (((((fjames)))))

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USADec 12, 2012

Ok Beautifulyou will u be my Angel

niah9Auckland, New ZealandDec 12, 2012

beautiful James....super nova of a velvet sun...lovely...Kathy

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USADec 12, 2012

I wonderthank you Kathy, i was wondering if you would comment and than what you would say :) but thank you your comments are always worth reading.

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USADec 12, 2012

Thank you LB i am glad to always get ur thought. I enjoy writing dark i suppose

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USADec 12, 2012

Thank you cabal,

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Mad skills ! I feel the vibe and share the rage !! If only we could mend our pens and hit the stage
Rock on ! Your on my level
I'd like to jam and have some musical intervention
To bad your in Fl and I'm in MS

JakeRMccomb, Mississippi USAMay 19, 2013

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 19, 2013

There is always the middle. Been looking to resurrect that part . I Really do miss music days. Maybe one day We will cross paths . I sure do have a lot to say im told

darkhorse555donegal, Donegal IrelandMay 21, 2013

jesse i feel you have a weight on your shoulder holding you sink or swim deep piece you write from the heart hope you have a lovely day i pass you a monster smile

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 21, 2013

Thanks LDH , much appreciated and have a great day yourself

jonE2toneOrlando, Florida USANov 24, 2013

I got ur back for sure

sundayrose1san francisco, California USANov 24, 2013

Jesse, there is so much tone of anger on this one, specially the last lines...but I know how you feel. In one of the worst current up by the Diamond Head in the Waikiki Beach, I will never forget when I almost died because I was caught on that brutal current. One surfer caught me and helped while my whole family wasn't even aware of my predicament that time.

But I survived and now I am very respectful and aware whenever I am in the ocean or water.

Thanks for this write Jesse.

SR

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USANov 25, 2013

Thank you 2Tones for stopping by…Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USANov 25, 2013

Thank you P, I appreciate your time and thoughts also thank you for sharing your story. Its always a pleasure my friend…Jesse

rapturecapturekerry, Kerry IrelandNov 25, 2013

Hi Jesse

Stunning thoughts...Fantastic read,

Loved it,thank you for sharing

Martina xxx

orientalkoruGlenella, Queensland AustraliaNov 25, 2013

"So please dear angels will you pull me back in
Ive struggled enough inside this current"

So much punch in this Jesse. Dark it maybe but all I see is the courage and fight within thee!

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 17, 2014

Miss MRC, I was reading back through some oldies and saw you so better late than never to say thank you…Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 17, 2014

And to you as well my Dear friend OK, thank you very much to both of you. Always a pleasure …Jesse

rapturecapturekerry, Kerry IrelandMay 17, 2014

Hi Jesse

Just read it again...

Feels like waking up from a bad dream ...
Hope you enjoy the song
Came to mind after reading your wonderful poem

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3YxaaGgTQYM

Martina xxx

jonE2toneOrlando, Florida USAMay 17, 2014

Like Martina I just read it again and as dark as ever. What else do you have hiding here?

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 19, 2014

Thank you always my dear Miss MRC for reading again. Always a pleasure…Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 19, 2014

And Bt\tw MRC this is a great song. Enjoyed and thank you again…Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAMay 19, 2014

Thank u kindly Mr 2Tones.always a pleasure...Jesse

OndosSydney, New South Wales AustraliaJun 1, 2014

Hauntingly in brilliant!

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAJun 1, 2014

Hi, fjames9701,
There is no more hopeless, this is what it is I've been treading on that fault line now its sink or swim… It's best to never underestimate the power of the Undertow and always have dear angels nearby. Thanks for sharing.

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAJun 2, 2014

Thank you kindly Mr Ondos, always a pleasure Sir. Thank you again…Jesse

fjamesj9701OPDunkinDonuts, Florida USAJun 2, 2014

Thank you GNJ for stopping by and good to see you as well…Cheers

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