Random thoughts on a Tropic Night
Lost in the tropics, mosquitoes and flies
Sucking my blood, Draining my life
Humidity stricken, sticking like glue
Sweat drips profusely, too hot to snooze
Night lamp flickers, nocturnal creatures play
Their conversation erupting, yet silence in the day
The smog filled sky, barely shows the moon
Reminiscing moments, passing so soon
Hours and days, that has disappeared
Victim of time and forgotten years
Withering away, with experiences learnt
Older and wiser, for I've been burnt
Sad thoughts and anger, flow into me
Afraid and broken, for being unable to see
Fallen to lies and false beliefs,
What happen to truth and loyalty?
The floor fan spins, blowing warm air
Regrettable past, now my soul is bare
I thought at times, love is only for fools
Losing all hope, then I found you
Loneliness and despair, sink slowly away,
An eternal flame, cast shadows that waltz and sway.
To the beat of coming rain and stirring wind,
The heavens open, cleansing our sin
Past lessons remembered, how to forget?
Not dwelling in history, or past regrets
Your not my first, but will be my last.
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Posted: Oct 2013
Comments (8)
you write a beautiful crafted poem with two topics, you and nature,but you need to do spell and grammar check coz its ruining the plot and style badly .
mosquitos - mosquitoes
for being unable see - for being unable TO see
then I founded you - then I found you
cases shadows that waltz and sway
cast shadows that waltz and sway
But not dwelling in history
By not dwelling OR Not dwelling in history
passed regrets - past regrets
Your not my first, but will be my last
My present and future, never my
past
THE 2ND LAST LINE DOES NOT AGREE WITH THE LAST LINE,
AND THEY DON'T SYNC WITH THE REST
UNLESS YOU LOSE THE LAST LINE
as i said. it sound so much better with these improvement. the last remark is your choice, just my suggestion
forgive me but that's the passion i felt reading this wonderful piece.