I walked toward the barn in what was pitch black night.. It was actually closer to dawn.. But to my mind's way of thinking it was still the dead of night.. I wore my old white robe, which I had many years ago, taken from some hotel.. during better times.. When the world was mine.. I had to lift my feet up and off of the mucky ground.. It was the only way that I could walk in his old musty smelling dark and way too large for me work boots.. I finally made my way to the old barn door.. With fingers stiff and frozen by the cold and rain... I lifted the latch... and went on in, greeted by the grateful stare Of all the horse there.. And all eyes were upon me with an anticpating glare, I fed them all... then as I left them there.. I quickly made my way back toward the house... and quietly as a mouse I donned my night time clothes... Slept a few hours and again I rose.. only to wonder... Is this all there is... Is this what my life. Has become? Exceedingingly.. Numb.
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Posted: Oct 2010
About this poem:
More of a metaphor... than what it seems...but if you can guess it? Only in your dreams...
jeddah12singapore, Central Singapore SingaporeOct 26, 2010
what a vivid sight you put on my imagination, outstanding poem and very well penned,,a good piece mam,,thanks for sharing
cafetwo2010Harford county, Maryland USAOct 26, 2010
Quiet storm.. Very touching..but me thinks that it is not so much what your life has become, but who you have become which is an'exceedingly beautiful person who feels deeply and shares deeply.. You have become everything! cafe'
His QS, seems as you were left stranded, by someone, in your Night clothes, went to the barn or shelter snuck back in the house, like a mouse, and he took Your shoes, and left His boots.. then Baffled where Life has ended up... then got exceeding Numb, (drunk)
Nice write... this is what is seems to say to me...
Describe it as a kind of a Mystery Of Lost Love...
tHANK-YOU Jeddah for your comment... I'm almost sure that no one will get it... brcause it it what it is.. and only in my mind.. but in my mind it is my reality,... if that makes any sense..
Hi Larry and thanks for your comments.close but no cigar.. no cigar...... no illusions and no excuses...... get it now?
Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaOct 27, 2010
Don't we all go through that introspective process...just too true...but you have to stay positive...that's what survival is all about.
PinkpoetressClarksburg, West Virginia USAOct 27, 2010
QuietStorm, I don't know much about dreams, but I know you have had more than your share of hurt and have been through more than many of us will ever know. Be good to yourself dear. Take care.
freeatlast64847Lanagan, Missouri USANov 5, 2010
Won't guess on the metaphor, but enjoyed the poem. You paint a vivid picture.
I'll take a chance post my view if i'm wrong then no apology cause that's my view. I think you dreamed of a life a different then the one you are living. I think as we are youg we have a picture of what our lives should be. when we live our life and get a little older we stop and say what happen to my dream. this isn't what it suppose to be.
There is a season for everything...I enjoyed your poem and detached narration. It was very effective :)
niah9Auckland, New ZealandNov 5, 2010
Hidden meanings maybe QS, but what I have found when I feel like this, almost sleep walking, things are about to change...whatever you hope for, fingers crossed it's about to come true for you....Niah
Comments (13)
then Baffled where Life has ended up...
then got exceeding Numb, (drunk)
Nice write... this is what is seems to say to me...
Describe it as a kind of a Mystery Of Lost Love...
I don't know much about dreams, but I know you have had more than your share of hurt and have been through more than many of us will ever know. Be good to yourself dear. Take care.
I think you dreamed of a life a different then the one you are living. I think as we are youg we have a picture of what our lives should be. when we live our life and get a little older we stop and say what happen to my dream. this isn't what it suppose to be.