When did I learn to forget my own heart? Surely I knew of it when I was small; For I remember that most pleasant part- that which can cope with the pain of the fall?
Why did I learn to forget my own mind? Surely without it I can't even think... Inside myself, I am left deaf and blind- while I am steered to the edge, to the brink...
When did I learn to forget my own soul? Surely I knew of it when I was born... And who did teach that my innermost goal should be to ensure that I'm innermost torn?
Why did I learn to forget all those things? Surely remembrance would better have been… Sleepwalking slowly through fiery rings which I'd avoid, if the rings could be seen.
These are my Heart, and my Mind and my Soul- Surely they only belong but to me; Share I might, after regaining control- Out of my own free will, as you see.
...When did I learn to forget my own will...? Surely, without it I'll never regain the castle on top of my innermost hill- All my attempts will be always in vain...
So, I awaken. And slowly I walk slowly I open my eyes to the light shining inside me. And slowly I talk- Say to my self: "See-it will be alright..."
Do I remember? But, surely I do. Slowly, but surely my memories return; stronger and stronger, until I can view The fire which inside my heart still does burn... (WJB)
Thanks... And I hope I'm not going to sound too much like a complete eejit-- but what on earth is an 'Iambic whatchamacallit' ?
swade777Grants Pass Area, Oregon USAFeb 17, 2011
Well, I don't know what the finer points of "iambic pentameter" is?, but if Fellsman says it.... you can take it to the bank! All I know is.... I know talent when I see it.... and you've got it!!!
FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKFeb 17, 2011
Hi Hek
It's ten syllables to the line - don't tell me you broke the code without even thinking about it? It takes the rest of us years of practise
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Thanks for the pat on the back!
And you are clearly schooled in the finer points of iambic pentameter.
Regards
Fellsman
And I hope I'm not going to sound too much like a complete eejit-- but what on earth is an 'Iambic whatchamacallit' ?
It's ten syllables to the line - don't tell me you broke the code without even thinking about it? It takes the rest of us years of practise
Cheers
Fellsman