Slow reaching upward Sun caressing climaxing. Head stretching yearning.
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Posted: Jun 2011
About this poem:
I wanted to try haiku and am unsure of the correct way to do it. So would some of you kind poets please help me. This poem is about the day of a poor little sunflower being woken by the sun. If this is not haiku would someone or all please change wording to make it one and tell me what I have done wrong. Thank you so much for your time.
I switched it out and retitled it. Thanks so much to all and the ones who emailed too. I got it now. Yeah!!!!!!! I can haiku :-)
Nice haiku my friend, but generally the rule is 5,7,5 syllables, so swap the second line for the third and it will be right and I think read better. rob
Comments (10)
I like it!!
rob
Thank you Jazzy.
Thank you Kickit I now have a better understanding of it. It does not seem so hard now If you like I can send you the info I received on it. It is fun
(Rob) Thanks sailor. Have done and retitled. Hope all is well with you
This is a great Awakening to haiku!
Thank you Redex