Awakening

Slow reaching upward
Sun caressing climaxing.
Head stretching yearning.
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Posted: Jun 2011
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I wanted to try haiku and am unsure of the correct way to do it. So would some of you kind poets please help me. This poem is about the day of a poor little sunflower being woken by the sun. If this is not haiku would someone or all please change wording to make it one and tell me what I have done wrong. Thank you so much for your time.

I switched it out and retitled it. Thanks so much to all and the ones who emailed too. I got it now. Yeah!!!!!!! I can haiku :-)

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jazzy75
Happygolucky4u

I like it!! cheering
kickit22
not sure .myself but would love to learn that style maybe will both learn somethen new.thumbs up
trurorob
Nice haiku my friend, but generally the rule is 5,7,5 syllables, so swap the second line for the third and it will be right and I think read better.
rob
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Thank you Jazzy. bouquet




Thank you Kickit I now have a better understanding of it. It does not seem so hard nowuh oh If you like I can send you the info I received on it. It is funapplause



(Rob) Thanks sailor. Have done and retitled. Hope all is well with youteddybear
gnj4u
Hi, Happygolucky4u,
This is a great Awakening to haiku!
DaBomb72
I'm not familiar with this kind of writing, but i like the idea ! Thank you Happygolucky !handshake
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Thank you gnj4u for your help on getting me to understand bouquet
ReaderOfSouls
This is a great one to start out, Happy. :)Keep writing, it only gets better! wine thumbs up
Redex
I have dabbled in hakiu as I like the form and pictures and feelings painted in few words, this one is does the job for meteddybear
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Thank you Readerofsouls. I would like to learn different types of poetry. This kind is fun.bouquet


Thank you Redexwave
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