Lucy stumbles back into, that little room Tired worn and weary, all energy consumed The horrors of the day are etched upon her face As she slumps down at the table,her mind in a daze
Everything is as it was, nothings out of place She feels his presence in every corner,in every space The morning coffee cups still standing,in the gloom The knives ,the forks,the plates,his silver sugar spoon Shining,shining through that gloom.
Lucy tries to piece together ,their last conversation Was it really about the weather? was there no indication She picks up his old cashmere sweater and holds it tight But then,the scent of his cologne,like dynamite ignites the tears that flow And she lets go All the pain and misery it flows Shes rocking,...rocking to and fro.
Oh how she wishes she had gone with him this morning Oh how she wishes she could be with him now But instead she finds herself deep in mourning As she leaves this house of stone...alone
Lucy picks a bunch of wild forget-me-knots And throws them towards the shore But they don't go very far And she thinks she hears an old familiar voice Call her name,above the noise Of the crashing surf Then she dries another tear And heads down towards the pier To get the boat back to the mainland..
From somewhere a corncrake sings his evening song Hes happy, now the storm is gone But for Lucy it goes on and on and on...
Oh how she wishes she had gone with him this morning Oh how she wishes she could be with him now But instead she finds herself,deep in mourning Now shes going home alone Now shes going home alone..
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Posted: Oct 2013
About this poem:
This is part of a song I was writing about a real life tragedy that happened many years ago.
Knowing the background to this story , the words you have written are even more poignant .. Beautifully written Raven --you should feel rightly proud of this - F
andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKOct 5, 2013
Hi Ravensgold, I very much enjoyed this read, I thought almost from the start that it might be a song and I wasn't disappointed. It is well written, makes a good poem too in my humble opinion, if you haven't finished it yet, I really hope that you will....and...Post it here of course so that we can read too....Thankyou for posting!...Andrew...
Hi Andrew,Nice to meet you. Thank you for your interest and your insightful comments and after reading some of your work, I value your imput very much.
rapturecapturekerry, Kerry IrelandOct 6, 2013
Hi Ravensgold
I really enjoyed reading Alone, it drew me in from the beginning... One wonders what happened, and why she did not go....so you leave the reader pondering!. Thank you for sharing
Hi Martina,Nice to meet you. I am glad you enjoyed this piece, and to answer your question... This is based on a true story about a mysterious disappearance on one of the small islands off the Nth West coast about 80 years ago. There were many rumours, sightings etc...but it still remains a mystery to this day.Thanks again for your comments Martina Anthony.
ladyjewelDurban, KwaZulu-Natal South AfricaOct 6, 2013
sounds like a wonderful song, love the emotion and mystery in this
diana_1San fernando, San Fernando Trinidad and TobagoOct 6, 2013
beautiful... but for some reason I feel like I actually know lucy can see her in that little room... can see her by the shore... can see the despair in the slump of her shoulders.... oh raven, very well done.... thank you
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the words you have written are even more poignant ..
Beautifully written Raven --you should feel rightly proud of this - F
I truly value them for the encouragement they give me.
I really enjoyed reading Alone, it drew me in from the beginning...
One wonders what happened, and why she did not go....so you leave the reader pondering!.
Thank you for sharing
Martina xxx
I am glad you enjoyed this piece, and to answer your question...
This is based on a true story about a mysterious disappearance on one of the small islands off the Nth West coast about 80 years ago. There were many rumours, sightings etc...but it still remains a mystery to this day.Thanks again for your comments Martina Anthony.
I am glad you enjoyed it.,...regards Anthony
Much like me. Im happier now. I'm growing out of it
Thanks for the read.
Phyllis