final poem

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Jan 2011 775 Views 20 comments

final poem

Author: Unknown

i know im different then you but even i hurt too
ill take everything since i was five years old
everything iv written my poems and all
i tried to fit in where i don't belong
even though it makes me sad today
ill not right another poem ever again
even my songs will be trash all because
you hate everything i do all because
you say im different then you

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Posted: Jan 2011

About this poem:

this is my last thing ill ever write because someone wants to me my poems are crap no one realy like them anyways so at

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stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 14, 2011

thank you for letting me enjoy for awile iv wrote so many poems maybe people are right maybe everything i do is crap but i do have a heart to you all broke my heart but thanks for letting me put what poem i put ..... john

las63Lostinspace, Tennessee USAJan 14, 2011

who told you it's crap? Don't listen to negative things from others!!

swade777Grants Pass Area, Oregon USAJan 14, 2011

John.... a word of encouragement.... you're NEVER going to satisfy EVERYONE with your writing talents.... there's ALWAYS going to be critics out there..... they're not out there to destroy you, but to strengthen you!! A muscle cannot be built until it is stretched beyond it's limit... once healed from the over stretching... it's stronger!!! Be a muscle - NOT a mouse!!! Get back into your writing and EXPRESS YOURSELF!!! Don't worry about the critics! They're going to criticize someone regardless if it's YOU or not! There's more of us that enjoy your writing than not, so keep it coming!

moonontideSydney, New South Wales AustraliaJan 14, 2011

HEAR HEAR SWADE.
Of course we are different Stillframe
YOU ARE UNIQUE BEAUTIFUL EXCEPTIONAL
When none else hugs you. Hug yourself. You deserve it.

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 14, 2011

thanks my friends very much

niah9Auckland, New ZealandJan 14, 2011

I don't know who said it, but they have no right...you have as much right as anyone to post stillframe, please don't stop...sometimes we get so busy with life we don't have the time to pop into PC...really, but when we can we're back.....Niah

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 14, 2011

right thanks i been here so long i should know that by now

marikiaTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 15, 2011

No, you've been here and will stay here where you belong. This is a beginning and your talent will be getting stronger and stronger. The more you write the better a verse. If you don't practice you will never make it. Whatever you have done up to now is good and promising. This I know for sure cause I have read all your poems. No comment does not mean nobody reads. Carry on and cheers.

hedistuffLayopolis, West Virginia USAJan 15, 2011

you're crying out for help john...for attention. I do the same thing with every post that I make.

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 15, 2011

right thanks my friends

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAJan 15, 2011

Hi, stillframe,
My son once said to me that it should not matter whether anyone else likes what I write; it is enough that I write for myself. I try to remember his words and find strength in them; yet, I do need encouragement every now and then. The metaphysical question, "If a tree falls in a forest and no one is around to hear it, does it make a sound?" remains: substance versus bundle theory amidst the possibility of unperceived existence! Keep writing and sharing. That's what poets do.

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 15, 2011

right thanks my friend

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 15, 2011

this is the way iv writing poetry since i was five i have poems on here before i was stillframe johntheraven1 and justmejohn how can i change that

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKJan 15, 2011

Your writing hasn't changed since the age of five? Thereby lies the problem.

I don't mind trying to help anybody so long as they are prepared to try and help themselves!

OK Step right away from your comfort zone. Acknowledge that there is a vast amount of room for improvement in your writing, for example, your punctuation is virtually non existent.

Next, try and set your writing into verses of 4 lines to start with, thats the easiest format to begin with.

If you can rhyme some lines, that's good, if not, at least set your story out in neat lines, it looks better and is easier to read, and that would be free verse.

That's as far as I am going for now, it's pointless overloading with information. I'm sure I am not the only one on here who will help with advice if you in turn show any inclination to improve your writing.

The ball is in your court.

Regards

Fellsman

stillframeOPoklahoma city, Oklahoma USAJan 15, 2011

thanks i will try

marikiaTbilisi, GeorgiaJan 15, 2011

Master Fellsman, you are a genius of encouragement. We all need to improve. Whatever you said here is true for me and many others here. We can help ourselves by trying to improve in many ways possible. Thank you!!!

andrew149Southbourne, nr.Bournemouth, Dorset, England UKJan 15, 2011

Hi John, I remember when you were posting under the name John the Raven, remember that you write for yourself, so it is yourself that needs to be happy with something you write. Maybe it would help if you did some more reading, anything that you think you might like, and also get a dictionary, we all have them, cos we don't all know what some words mean. Also it might help you on this site if you were to read other peoples poems, and maybe do a little commenting yourself, that way you will be able to get more into it....I am a published author, and yet not everyone likes my stuff either, the point is that I keep writing, no matter how hard things get, and I can tell you that I have had it very hard sometimes, I won't bore you with the details, enough to say that you can pull yourself up....If you want to.....Kindest regards...
Andrew