50 Words 50 Words challenge

by HekamaatAskeaton, Limerick, Ireland

Feb 2011 441 Views 7 comments

50 Words (50 Words challenge)

I once tried a poem with just fifty words-
The start was quite easy- the middle a treat;
When reaching the end it just went to the birds-
I cut that piece out, which turned into a feat.
I tried very hard to make sure it would fit;
But then I completely forgot the last bit…

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Posted: Feb 2011

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Comments (7)

FellsmanLake District, Cumbria, England UKFeb 20, 2011

Hi Hek

It's just like Schubert's 8th (unfinished) symphony then, and that still gives a lot of pleasure. Enjoyable rhyme and rhythm.

Regards

Bill

agoodguy2havesuffolk, Virginia USAFeb 20, 2011

Hekamaat, an amusing write indeed. harder to do than at first appears eh? ;-)

HekamaatOPAskeaton, Limerick IrelandFeb 20, 2011

...And with that last line, just a few little words-
and the whole o'er the limit- and back to the birds...

gnj4uBoston, Massachusetts USAFeb 20, 2011

Hi, Hekamaat,
What's a few extra words among friend! Here's to putting one feat in front of another!

Macduff5Newcastle, New South Wales AustraliaFeb 21, 2011

Hi Hek,
What an appropriate place for a poet to come from, Limerick. You should have been on here a month or so ago when the limeric comp was in full swing. Anyway nice to meet you and I thought your effort pretty good. An imaginative title

Cheers mate

marikiaTbilisi, GeorgiaFeb 21, 2011

In principle, this is how any poem is composed in most cases: a pleasurable start, not so much pleasurable middle, but still a treat, and then a dead-end, seemingly no way out, - a harrowing experience all in all. You've managed to describe this process in just 50 words and met the challenge with dignity. Hope to see more of your poems here.