Lend me your eyes so I can see Billions of people but none for me Random thoughts explode into fireworks Cascading downward explains the hurt
As the embers fall I close my eyes Twinkling downward waiting til they die My head falls back from carrying pain Then another shell suddenly explodes The crowd cheers loudly would someone explain
They cheer for death as they hit the ground Never took time to stop and look around A bright soul twinkles down to its death Never given the chance to love on its last breathe
Like a shell shot high deep into the night Let my love explode I'm filled with brilliant light I may look dark and gloomy on my outter side But what counts most is the glow from inside
Cherish me now I'm almost out of time Capture my light and we'll both combine Like a cinder that fades on its journey to the ground I want my journey with you instead of feeling down
My shell may be hard to break I promise to make it worth your wait Take me away from this screaming crowd Take me with you to your highest cloud
We'll arrive I'll shine my light on you My potential is there bet you never knew Just take me away and ignite my fuse The next explosion will be just for you
Burn with me babe as we fall from the sky I'll never ask you to question why We'll fall together through the thin night air When we land we both wont care The crowd will be there and they will cheer!
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Posted: Aug 2011
About this poem:
a gloomy start....with a happy ending....a poem of sadness turning into happiness!!...yeah once in awhile i'll put a twist into it.lol.
WOW!!!! just doesnt cover this amazing poem.. the last 2 stanza I loved and were so strong..
dreamwolf5264OPfrancestown, New Hampshire USAAug 22, 2011
thanks country lady,the idea for this write came from a huge fireworks show that i attended saturday night,year after year i watch it alone,and with friends...but never with a special girl.
Poetnumber1St James, Port of Spain Trinidad and TobagoAug 22, 2011
Dear DreamWolf A powerful write indeed,i think you nailed it in your last stanza,i was expecting the switch of mood,i think you did a fantastic job and hope to read more of your work soon,best wishes to you.
Sincerely Yours PN1
Lavender_BlueBirmingham, West Midlands, England UKAug 22, 2011
"Capture my light and we'll both combine Like a cinder that fades on its journey to the ground"
That's a lovely line DW...
Searingly honest poem... excellent!
LB
Odette67Penrith, Cumbria, England UKAug 22, 2011
Burn with me babe as we fall from the sky I'll never ask you to question why We'll fall together through the thin night air When we land we both wont care The crowd will be there and they will cheer!
The whole poem "Exquisite"
dreamwolf5264OPfrancestown, New Hampshire USAAug 22, 2011
dear lavender blue,poet number 1,odette67..thanks for your warm comments,every once in awhile i tap into my deepest thoughts...this was the result..and to the woman poets out here..yes there are guy poets with very deep thoughts and they don't dress in dark clothes and are called EMOS.LOL.
MysticalliTeresina, Piaui BrazilAug 22, 2011
"I may look dark and gloomy on my outter side But what counts most is the glow from inside"
sometimes I´m the opposite
great poem, dreamwolf!
lorentzhalifax, Nova Scotia CanadaAug 22, 2011
I noticed that..as well.. like a cinder fades out its journey to the ground.. go to varanasi,india,sit down on the river ghats looking at the cremations and chant the cender's finale fly..
dreamwolf5264OPfrancestown, New Hampshire USAAug 23, 2011
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A powerful write indeed,i think you nailed it in your last stanza,i was expecting the switch of mood,i think you did a fantastic job and hope to read more of your work soon,best wishes to you.
Sincerely Yours
PN1
Like a cinder that fades on its journey to the ground"
That's a lovely line DW...
Searingly honest poem... excellent!
LB
I'll never ask you to question why
We'll fall together through the thin night air
When we land we both wont care
The crowd will be there and they will cheer!
The whole poem "Exquisite"
But what counts most is the glow from inside"
sometimes I´m the opposite
great poem, dreamwolf!
like a cinder fades out its journey to the ground..
go to varanasi,india,sit down on the river ghats looking at the
cremations and chant the cender's finale fly..